lapping black tongues one hundred dogs
kiss me awake to-day
mutilation of the boy
on the chest of his lovers tears
foaming teeth and quenching thirst
i drink from your fountain of lust
o mother she sleeps on my come stained sheets
bath in her blood she spills for me i do
sister sister wake up
run run run with me
skin me alive with your alabaster lies
flesh to bone save my soul
jesus christ screamed
and i fell to my knees
eleven and twenty years living
in toxic sin of hot burning lust
pink laughter under the sea
i drown in you again
pulling photographs of some lost youth
i used to know with chains rusty and old
gave up sex for the girl one last time
too bad only my hand now
gives me an immaculate ejaculation
Author notes
maybe i should explain what this is but i will save that for another day
Written May 12th, 2004
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ughhhh lol wow
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so is that a wow of what the hell were you thinking. or a wow of intensity? personaly im going for what were you thinking, because i have no f'n idea.
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more like a wtf wow lol
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lol... hey as long as you enjoyed it.
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Oh yeah. Forgot these
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Haven't been on to read anyone's poems in so long. Thought I'd try to squeeze in one of yours while on break. I've always loved your way with words. This is so dark and twisted... and full of a lonely pain somehow. Maybe that's just the way I'M interpretting it, but that's just me. Hee
Hope to hear from ya soon.
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I miss your poetry, stopping by and reading old ones.
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I always thought this was one of your darker writes. No comment of mine is on here. Strange. I think the title definetly fits the content. Peace BF
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A clever use of words and ideas. It tapers down the page with sight and sound. Reminds me of a flushed off hooker after she has paid her debt and doesn't leave the room but should be leaving. Am in your face and brash feast that ignited the screen with visions and valued use of vacabulary...A steaming and collected force. Stunning and suttle.
Your friends ,
Jaunty pill and Slaughter
( Too lazy to each sing off , So we're using the same account and computer )
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Well of course the title drew me in
and after reading it, which I did enjoy, I'm still not sure if this is a serious piece. It began that way, a bit disturbing with mother sleeping on come stained sheets and all but........still not sure. Maybe another read or two. 
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Rocks and is clever!!!
Hey, what a cool poem!! I am glad you explained where you are coming from a bit, as it is always good to get the story behind the story. It seemed to convey some painfulness as well as some humor, and only gave away just enough to get what it is about. But personally, I consider an immaculate ejaculation to be one with just my mind and no hand (kind of keeps it on the level of a virginal miracle sort of), but I never can do it, and have to go the old fashined way. Not that there's anything wrong with that! It's generally pretty right, in fact! lol Anywayz, loved the poem! -
lol laughter is good.. it cracks me as well, was the first 2 words that i came up with in writing this... but im sure those memories are more poignant if you ever had a man cheat on you with more than just his thoughts. as the first part of this write is about my one time i acted on more than just those thoughts and the second about how the thoughts always continue and learning my lesson as well the whole peice is
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Ooo this is a maze of memories to me. A jumble of snap shots you've taken and collaged together for us. I LOVED the imagery and the strong langauge, very enticing! the words: "immaculate ejaculation" cracked me up tho, I can't read them without laughing...and i'm not sure if that was your intention, probably not, i'm just a freak like that. anyway, great write, quite original --mary
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Most excellent
Memories,past ,dreams,nightmares & fantasies all blend into one...I may be off target but thats what I get from your write this time.
Sort of like a mixture of one's life and what it was and now to what it is .A verse with a riddle in which the reader tries to find the puzzle piece that fits and finds its place into which it belongs.I find your works thus far brilliant ~ G ~ -
Those kind of thoughts aren't unsual, not for men or women.
I believe that to fantasize is a good thing, as long the lust stays in our mind (if we have a partner). Bad thing is when everyone start to really make of such thoughts reality.
An immaculate ejaculation (still don't want to know about that thing...lol) can be quite health and safe
Mari
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