Music plays
Over in my jaded head
I’ve made a broken record
From the words you’ve said
You put a shiny arrow
In my porcelain heart
Your bitter words
Carelessly ripped me apart
The radiant rainbow
Turns to black and white
And the sunny day
Seems like a dreary night
A fog has covered
My yellow-brook road
The place you walked with me
And turned to gold
You hold my heart
In your stone-cold hand
It is still in flight
Not ready to abruptly land
Walking on shards of glass
Waiting till I fall through
Yellow-brick road has broken
Because I’m without you
Watching the world go by
In a discontented daze
Not holding onto hope
Not praying it’s a phase
I love you too much
And will never let you go
You may have moved on
But in my heart you’ll always flow
I believe in our love
It is all that I've got
In your self-consumed mind
Memories crumble and rot
My open eyes were blind
I didn't see
That I believed in you
But you had no faith in me
Love disappears
It travels into the distance
Along a cobblestone path
And it's gone in an instance
Author notes
Please comment, I'll return the favor
Written May 11th, 2004
A contest entry
- Misery and Love by Heartbroken.
400 points, ended May 17, 2004, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a great write...i like the way it just tumbled down the page and read so wonderfully...the whole thing is lovely
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this is awesome. i love it. its so well written with awesome rhyming patterns...and full of emotions...hope u win the cotesnt! u rock !
haha nice write!
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great poem, lots of emotion and portrays how the person if feeling really well. very emotive and a great write...i enjoyed it a lot.
natazzle21 xx
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whew
i really do love you babe, we're gonna make it through.
- Adam -
Adam, this poem really is not about you. I know it gives that you that effect, and after I wrote it I read the poem, and I had a feeling it made a reflection of last week. This poem is not about you and me though-- it's about two good friends of mine- and one that can't seem to let go. And I know that friend still loves, but loves so much to let go- so the other will be content- love so strong, that they suffer for the other..... kind of reminds me of last year, but it's far from that- just a contest poem, not a reflection upon my feelings for you. I love you, and i know that you paint everything in my life gold, and you are the hand I hold down the yellow-brick road.. I love you and I know we both have faith in OUR LOVE..
~Christine~
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great right! i definately know it isn't about somnuslupus though! this was sooooo beautiful! i loved the flow and the vivid imagery! u used absolutely perfect similes and metaphors! i hope u win the contest! this peice deserves to win the gold!
~meg~
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I do have faith in you darling...
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Hey Laura, thanks so much for all of your comments in the last few days, it's so nice of you- I appreciate it!
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This is so beautiful....I enjoy reading poems about love, all kinds...I really love this poem..I admire you as a writer..You are very talented....This is a great poem...Laura
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