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Goodthinkful

 

Handcuff the pens and reams of paper!
Illegally detain the intangible conscience,
Ship it to Cuba, and ignore its rights

Death count buried by complacent media,
Folded flags behind the curtain,
Weeping widows and parents on page six

We're winning, we're winning!
But, strangely, gas prices rise,
And children, yes, children! get the third degree

Flinging mud across television waves,
Petty, both petty, but no viable third,
As always, whoever wins, we all lose

Now, fighting underground,
The sound, hellhound, the lost and found,
Shoe box of forgotten dolls and asthma breathers,
Fighting for scraps of rat,
The slow trickle from stalactites
That burn the tongue,
And dilated pupils emit their own glow,
Don't you know?  The fiercest flow
Of messenger RNA hatred against collapsed veins,
The tattered lace, degenerate race,
Grimace before the solid rains
That beat upon the upper deck,
Balance the check, human leather vests,
Scrawls of charcoal on stone walls,
Failing tests, anapests, syntax, valence...

And whoever wins, we all lose.

Author notes

From CNN.com:

"PROSSER, Washington (AP) -- Secret Service agents questioned a high school student about anti-war drawings he did for an art class, one of which depicted President Bush's head on a stick."

Full article: www.cnn.com/2004/US/West/04/27/artwork.investigated.ap/index.html

Creepy stuff, man.

Oh, and the title is a word created by Ingsoc, and if you don't know what \that\ means, you're depriving yourself of a monumental achievement in all of English literature.

Thanks!

- Giovanni
Written May 11th, 2004

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  • RollingStone silver member
    May 14, 2004
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    bad enough that war kills and maims people, soldiers and civilians alike. but it also corrupts and numbs the social conscience and moral fiber of people and nations. it divides citizens and it fosters hatred. You say it perfectly in “And whoever wins, we all lose” I applaud you for applying your talents to social commentary, especially in exposing the fallacy of war.


  • AutoPilate
    May 14, 2004
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    Don't get me wrong; I support our troops, who often have to do things that may not be right because they must follow orders. I don't hate attack dogs, I hate the people holding their leashes.

    You're right, of course: we are each entitled to our opinion. And I'm grateful to be in a country that, as yet, allows me to express mine. But when we start interrogating schoolchildren for trying to express their opinion (the CNN.com article I mention in my Author's Comments elaborates on this), then I have to wonder what is being served by doing that.

    This poem isn't so much about the war itself; it's about what's happening in our country because of it.

    Thanks!

    - Giovanni


  • NakedFairy629
    May 13, 2004
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    I liked this write.
    But I support the war!! We need to stop them before they destroy us, this is only my opinion and everyone is entitled to one this is a "free" country right?? So God Bless our Troops and the work they are doing to keep us safe.
    If you disagree with me, please dont IM me about how wrong I am just remember It is a "free" country. I honor everyone ones opinions..this was a great write...it expresses how you feel. Which is awesome!!
    Everyone has a right to express themselves.!! Keep up the great work.
    God Bless you all.


  • Deviantpoetess
    May 13, 2004
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    excellent

    Awesome write Giovanni,I found reality in each stanza,Such as the gasoline prices ..
    The third stanza has me thinking..still to know it's depts
    "Children will get the 3rd degree"..Your words move me an inch closer to reality each time you post them
    Thanks for sharing
    Lori~


  • randomatic
    May 13, 2004
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    Well, that's what happens when you live in the beginnings of a police state. Have you ever seen the PATRIOT ACT before? It's a document created to destroy your civil liberties. With it, they can invade every inch of your privacy without a warrant, and using this act, along with some other BS bills they've passed, they're able to come into your house, withot a warrant, and if you tell anyone about it, you'll be charged with treason.

    that's already happening. and it's going to get worse. the only way to stop it is to resist.


  • PurpleAnarch
    May 13, 2004
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    Truth

    Exactly.
    So many thing's going into the staunch of literary expression today. If allpoetry was government funded...
    Good write, hopeful.
    Even better read.


  • May 12, 2004
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    Great job. Agreed...not much else to say. Well done.

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