Flight approaching, soon to land.
A vast carpet of city lights
and cars like ants on arteries
meet my eyes.
I am a tiny speck of an insect
returning home from business
to one of many hundreds of
urban suburban hives.
Seeing from above
lets my imagination realize
how vast things are...
how small I am.
Me, one amongst an explosive species
of 5 billion+; Me, composed of billions of
single cells; Me, belonging to but one species
amid so many others whose numbers can only be guessed.
Me, on what seems a huge planet,
yet is but one of many others orbiting
but one of countless stars whose light is the basis
for food that makes all life possible.
One tiny solar system...
in one 'Milky Way' galaxy,
that's one of countless other
galaxies. All composed
of molecules consisting of atoms...
Do I have permission, now,
to have a headache?:)
--Uncle Greg
(http://www.unclegreg.com)
Author notes
Written April 20th, 2002
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Beyond Excellent
So far this poem has to be one the most intresting on this website, I trully enjoyed. -
I don't know about giving you permission to have a headache but the weight of all your thoughts has given me a headache.
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ants on arteries that crawls in my veins...creeps
This is definitely the most interesting poem I've read tonight.
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understandably driven, the issuance of nightmarish images from this can lead to pretty large headaches. just thinking of the myriad of visual cells that an insect has, and each one of them giving you a headache --- A big ouch -- good job
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excellent
sheesh, i think i have a headache now...lol Thoroughly enjoyed the trip :-) -
don't touch it!
Macro meets micro, great perception G-Man. Humbling, makes me wonder how all those big egos can fit into this tiny planet,huh? -
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urban suburban hives.
i like that line.
the arteries bit works well with this, too. -
neutral
Almost home, soon to land
as our flight approaches
I gaze down at city lights and
cars like ants on arteries
of freeways...lights stretching
in all directions as far as I can see.
i think that you could omit 'of freeways' AND 'in all directions as far as i can see' to give this a more visual feel. when you TELL (describe plainly in subjective language), it sort of detracts from the view-feel and i believe this could be stronger if you were to focus on those concrete images and tone down the 'internalized' subjectivity.
just an opinion. -
excellent
enjoyed
very interesting
well written
a great read
~*~adriana~*~ -
neutral
Oy
Hands you the tylenol. -
neutral
do you remember the film in physics class where the camera goes from the girl in the backyard to way into space and then zooms back in till it's in the world of atoms? This reminds me of that film. Use of the word tolled, or told? -
excellent
Well...yeah, putting it like that...makes ya feel really small...heh. But then that makes you wonder if there is any other life beyond our earth...but that's a different topic. Anyways, enjoyed the write, I was able to envision it all ;) nice. -
encouraging
Fantastic write. I like your perspective. -
encouraging
Interesting !
I never thought of things that way. Makes a person think !
great write ! -
encouraging
Oh brain pain
Fantastic write :)
Claire xx
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