Sitting in this foresaken place,
My dark castle,
Watching all my defenseless prey,
Thinking, *All of them will experiance my pain!*
Watching the young man enter the keep,
Thinks he's brave enough to fight me,
I'll feel the blood sink through his skin,
As he becomes one dark sin!
He approaches me so quietly,
I won't make a sound
'Till I'm ready to bite into his flesh,
Soon he will become a beast like me!
He's watching me so silently,
"Afraid of a man that was once like you?"
He doesn't respond,
Just looks at my long, black robe with my iron crosses.
"Now it is your turn!"
I sink my fangs into the young mans skin,
Hear him moan in pain
As he falls to the ground.
Now you will feel my pain
See everything I'm forced to go through everyday
Abandon your hope young man
Your as good as gone!
Author notes
POSERS SUCK
Written May 10th, 2004
A contest entry
- Original and Dark if you want! come and see! by beautifuLetDoWn.
330 points, ended May 24, 2004, 14 entries
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WOW i liked it awsome imagry i had my mouth dropped the whole time. just waiting to read the rest after i had to sit and comtemplate it all but it was very awsome!
~*Elisabeth*~ -
Thanks for the comments everyone, I hope you all do well in the contest!
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Yeah and POSERS SUCK
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I have little different opinion on vampires, BUT this is your and is excellent. that flow and rhyme. One of poems i will read more than once... good job and good luck in contest agains me
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Vampires are awesome...I love the imagery you've used here...a dark and stormy night....
(Feels that way!)
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Wow this kicked Ass..*pardon my french
very dark poem, i love vampires! wow this was great! loved how it tied into revenge in way, like you want people to fee the same, just wonderful write! imagery was nice and the flow was great without force! well done!
Good luck in the contest
~*Jess -
Very nice... I did one about vampires...totally different though . Yours is more of a story but very interesting! You used nice imagery and the ambiance was torrid. Good poem!
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awesome poem. i like how the vampire wants revenge and he gets it. the iron crosses thing doesnt seem to quite fit tho. i love it
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Wow, great poem! I gave me shivers, and it sacred me. Good luck in the contest.
~Kill Quinn
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