I and the night are one,
As I silently stalk the shadows
I hunger,
To drink of thee
An oath to darkness I have sworn
Evil shadows cover me,
Unholy works to be done
Before the rising sun,
No peace, no forgiveness,
For my sin
My world is black and gray,
Don't cry for me
Nor pray for me
My father lives below,
My only friends the wolf and night,
Dark paths I must go
No more sunlight upon my head
Moonlight fills my sight
No heavens angelic destiny
Just an eternal blood thirst night
Author notes
Written April 20th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Bitten On the Neck by Halocaust.
350 points, ended February 26, 2005, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Vampires! by poisonivystar4.
700 points, ended December 3, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Oh, that's cool! I like the way that your poem compliments your picture, I can totally see that running through his head as he's being painted.
Good luck in the contest!
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Stunning....
.... Another poem I love. I write from the point of view of a Vampire sometimes and I liked the expression on this one. I will be reading more from this collection. You are a grean writer!
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Stunning....
.... Another poem I love. I write from the point of view of a Vampire sometimes and I liked the expression on this one. I will be reading more from this collection. You are a grean writer!
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Love it grea job.
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Dark and wicked, though put rather sadly.
Thank you for entering this in my contest. Best of luck and keep on writing,
Nooni
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Thanks so much for sharing...this is really Amazing!!!
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wow.. very powerful... nicely written and great language
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wow this write was very cool.. i can honestly say i have never read anything like this before. i really liked it..you are a very talented writer.great job
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Excellent write weaving an enticing tale of darkness and lust, very vividly described details, chilling to read, yet alluring at the same time, excellent poem cool to read.
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kickass!!!!!!!!
this was very good, very gothic, very dark
love it, keep up the great work!!!!!! thanks so much for entering!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
~PunKiN -
Well described way of the vampire.Interesting form. RED
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'I and the night are one,
As i silently stalk the shadows
I hunger,
To drink of thee'
Alright, Sis...that does it for me...no more vampire poems before bed...this'un scairt me too bad!!! hehehe 
Now I don't wanna go to sleep...I forgot my garlic wreath to put around my neck...& I can't sleep without it!!! LOL...Another fabulous piece from your oh~so~talented quill, Susan...
Wanda
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I love this, Sis! Usually I think of vampires as sexy but I feel sorry for the vampire you described..especially at the end "just an eternal blood thirst night". sniff
Love ya!
<3 Maureen
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I love vampires, they are awesome! I loved your poem!
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You need to get your hands on a few Sherrilyn Kenyons Dark Hunter novels. I know you're gonna love em. Puts a whole new light on the vampire thing.
Good piece, hun
Hugs
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Wow! This is good! I love it! It describes very well the emotion of such (btw, have wrote a vampire-poem too, in case ya wanna read). It's too often that vampire-poems are just like 'ow i just luuuuuve blood and i can stay up all night and i'm never gonna die isn't that swell?'. I hate those poems. But this one's very good, very well written too.
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'Eternal bloodthirst night'.
I doubt I have heard it put quite so beautifully before.
All the horror at being undead, all the killing, the blood spilling (oops..I didn't mean to rhyme) and all of the torture it must cause ones self, put in such a way that it makes me want to become one.
*chuckle*
This was an amazing poem, and being as I am a fan of the vampire, I was more than happy to read it.
I just wish my dial up would allow me to comment and read fast. For then, I am sure, you would be swamped with my praise.
I suppose you will just have to get it slowly
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I love this poem. It is very well written...
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I am a fan of the vampyer..you with words draw them well
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I looooooovvvvvvvveeeee vamp writes... you did well onre this one... nice job
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Nicly written.
DimishedFaith -
Wow great descriptions it was a perfect description of what I thought of a vampire. I would like to thank you for your comments on my poems "Abuser" and "A Simple Gesture". I would also like to invite you to add a stanza to my add-line "For the Love of Immortals" I would love for it to grow. Thanks again for the comments.
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Most Most Excellent
hmmm, How have I been to your site about a billion times and everytime before tonight missed your vampire collection!? What a trip! This was a most poetic statement of such a dark curse... I like this alot... Perfectly written and felt!
Sincerely,
MrPink -
I like you elaboration on the vampire you should read a poem called What am i from me it is very beautiful like yours
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i just love vampire tales they are so sexy
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Now I know why I placed first with my poem about you. Your words truly inspire me and make me want to write. It's hard not to think of beautiful words after reading one of your poems.
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AWESOMENESS!
!!! ima be a vampire one day..i hope 
its my goal lolz, some people say im crazy and scarying them, but hey its all good.. this is a really good write 
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Great Write
This was awesome and I need to read more of your vampire writes~ I don't know how I missed these ones~ What moon was I on~ Mesmerizing and wanting to read more~ Keep them coming my dear~ Enjoyed very much~ Imagery awesome also~ Big hugs and much love~ Desire
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Great!
I'm with repomen79, I'll be on the look out for you. My blood you won't get. Vampires are scarry. Have to keep my wooden spike at all times. lol. This was a great dark write. Spooky, and full of horror. lol. Excellent!
blahhhhhh
Renee
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excellent
hehehe liked this, made me laugh a little I guess I'm just evil lol :) -Brandon -
don't touch it!
Nice Vamp...great write..~~GILL~~~ -
don't touch it!
excellent. I wish ot be a vamp -
don't touch it!
This is so cool!!! DON'T CHANGE A THING!!!!
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:)cool write -
excellent
Wow, just take a wild stab at whom may be my next idle. This is amazing. repomen79, you should post this little note on your list of peoms if you already havn't, lol, this is good as will.
Sorry, back to you Blushfulmoon. This stuff is great. I'm thristy for more.
Roury -
excellent
Ya gotta go out just to get a bite,
Ya gotta wear formalwear every night,
When you give a girl the eye she'll think,
You only want her for a drink.
They'll hunt you til they find your bed,
Fill you with garlic and cut off your head,
Your history, and all it took,
Was a fool who read a comic book..........I don't mind if you like a redder wine. Why not, as long as its not mine...... -
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Booooy love this one,,,,so different from what I write,,,
but something about it I really do like -
encouraging
Ah this is intense, a very abtruse piece - made me think
Great write
Claire -
encouraging
yeah i like it too....i love the darker poems... : )
great write....
thanks for sharing.
~ViNce~ -
encouraging
I like This ! Dark !!!!
Gothic !!!
Great write !
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