A snowman
Stands to attention
In eremitical silence
His tears unseen
As they cut through
like mourning sunbeams
My mood;
Anhydrous copper sulphate
But here is the rain.
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Written May 10th, 2004
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"Arise for the dawn is ever rising"
Aye, I think everyone can say they have had an 'anhydrous copper sulphate day.' Sadly, I did understand the meaning of the metaphor, oddly enough because chemistry was not a pleasure for me. Anyways, your piece provokes much thought for the often 'untouched mind.'
Wonderful writ
Blessed be
Brianna
Thankyou for the comments on my pieces, I have been a bit late in returning the favors, sadly. -
OK, I had to look up Anhydrous Copper Sulphate, and I got the connection between it and your mood. Quite the neat little simile. Chemistry was never something I really got into. I was more into literature, go figure.
I do like the fact that you used the more intellectual approach to your writing, from what I have read so far. It really gets my brain firing on all cylinders again.
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Hehe quite interesting... I like it! Love the title too. It does make people think and paints an odd image in peoples minds. Good job!
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this is wonderful! Simply wonderful
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i really liked this one, like most of your writing, and it even made me think
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Very emotional, well done
I would have to remember more chemistry to understand your reference to anhydrous copper sulphate. Isn't that blue?
This image is totally cold and dismal. You have written with great economy. I hope you feel better soon.
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