The shedding of my former life.
The splitting of my heart.
The shredding of my soul,
Upon my paper tomb.
Trying to hear a voice
Within a shrieking wind.
Trying to reach a safehold
That exists in just a dream.
The things in life I need,
Dissolved in a maze of mirages.
The things that slowly kill
Still lurching, silent, by my side.
The circle that I walk in,
Steps slower then a clock.
Chocolate hearts and sour buds,
Just a test to see who'll win.
Trying to get across,
As someone worth the time.
Trying to act through life,
As though the path is paved.
Lungs are still and useless,
Memories shudder to a halt.
Life is drained from in me,
And thoroughly ripped apart.
Faces in the darkness,
Laughing at my joys.
Barbed and twisted claws,
Rip apart my smile.
A light upon my roof,
A ladder leading down.
A shaking hand to hold.
A spirit scans my goals.
I hold tightly to,
that demon by my side.
*authors note* I think it's done. . .
Author notes
Written May 10th, 2004
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Ooh! A paper tomb. .I'm assuming that's something about writing? I can't really grasp what that is about. I like that last stanza just because it is so different from the rest of the poem and it kind of reminds me of the ring(that's not why i like it. .i didn't really like that movie).
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wow. ok, seroiusly, wow! there were so many lines in here that just made me go, "whoa, this poem is totally, awesome..." seroiusly. the words you used, and how you put them together. there are so many phrases in here that i've never seen before. and all of the little concepts are so original and... WOW!
i can't even pick a favorite line. i liked the one about walking slower than a clock. that was awesome. and then the last two stanzas were just pouring with a whole new kind of feeling. it was almost a kind of hopefuly bit at the end. that's kinda how i felt at least. but then, it's very depressing at the same time. i can't explain how it can be both of those things... it just seems that way.
anywho... TOTALLY awesome write here. thanks a ton for IM'ing me. you have a nice day now, ok?
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keep going luv...its been so long since ive seen anything from you or even talked to you i miss you come back soon and maybe we'll get a chance to talk...
sly
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so far so good. please IM when you're done. for real.
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