upon
soft skin shimmer
red petals, dew drops dance
after cool summer shower, kiss
silk skin
~by Gregg Rowe~
upon
soft skin shimmer
red petals, dew drops dance
after cool summer shower, kiss
silk skin
upon
soft skin shimmer
red petals, dew drops dance
after cool summer shower, kiss
silk skin
Author notes
Written May 9th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Strict Love (many options) by CrimsonxxMachete.
300 points, ended February 12, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Wow, I was like what more is this poet going to write and then it was done!
But I do love what you have down, short and definatly sweet! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck! 
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even though i have commented on this before, i will again, because re-reading this just confirms how much i really enjoy this piece. short and simple, but it speaks volumes. gorgeous word choices, rich images, and lovely alliteration. i love the picture it creates in my mind and the way it reads - flowing of my tongue. a beautiful write. keep it up. thank you so much for entering and best of luck in the contest <3
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wow, beautiful... (yeah, I know you've heard it before) how about lovely, or astounding? Well, describe it how you will--I'll love this nonetheless. The imagery is simply breathtaking. How'd you do it and where can I learn? hehehe... great job, thanks for entering!!!
~Kelsey
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This is beautiful and to my mind overlaps purity with passion.
I love the background, it's very lovely. Good luck!
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awww...this really is beautiful. Short, but profound. I liked it! and I love your pen name!
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All this blends so well. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Gregg,
This is a wonderful cinquain. You managed to use such great alliteration several times as well. I always notice the colors and backgrounds first...it is the artist in me. Nice work.
Cheryl
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This has a nice sound to it, from all the "s" words, and has a calming effect on me. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Moses -
Excellent
Gregg, once again I am always in awe of your writes. Beautifully done with great imagery. Cinquains are a hard form but you made this flow together lovely.
Drkpoet
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Beautiful, tho I doubt someone blind would understand "red," "shimmering," or the sight of dew drops dancing.
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love the imagery? even tho its short, and the form is pretty hard to do, it shows a lot of description! very concise.. applause for this.
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absolutely beautiful. great descriptive words. wonderful warm piece. best of luck in the contest <33
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very beautiful... the alliterations and the internal rhythm of it just makes you want to sway when you read it... very nice... good luck in the contest!
Just Me...
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excellent
smiles . .this is awesome .
mind you, i have trouble not with the beauty of the words . .but that the symbolism may be lost on a blind person ? . . .chukles . .
but who cares . .it still potent in imagery and feeling
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Beautiful
Oh this piece is really uplifting and beautiful. Although cinquain's are short, they attain so much power and depth. You have portrayed it so well here. The picture was really beautiful too. Touching write, I love it. Take care, Kate
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Gosh !!! although it is few lines but it is very deeppppp...
brilliant piece..i do congratulate you....thanks!
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wooshness.... this is all pwettiful and stuff, lord-person.... it's a gentle and stuff... if anything, it reminded me of the rain... me loves the rain vewy much.... goes into fake proffesional poet critique-y person mode this was written quite nicely, your perfection in such a form is simply extravagent.. nods I must say, this is beautiful, and exquisitely elegant (ooh! double worded e, cookie for me ^^)....
may the pamagranate seeds of popcorn balls grace you with eternal butter
(([midori](_>
Edited on May 22, 8:09 p.m. because ''. -
i appriciated the vast information in such a short stanza.sort of like a haiku
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You picked an excellent letter of the alphabet to accentuate I love the sound of this, as I read it aloud (whispered it because my significant other is in bed trying to sleep). I think he would think me quite insane if I started reciting poetry to him just now
Beautiful yet again!
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i had no idea what a Cinquain was, i had to go look it up, and looking at the contest requirements i think you got just right. Brilliant, simply brilliant ~richard
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Excellent minimal work, strong in images, but light in feeling. Keeps everything soft, a wonderful piece.
-matt-
P.S.: Yellow roses are good too, but so are fire and ice ones .
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This is a very nice cinquain. it is so difficult to use this form to say anything meaningful. I enjoyed reading this.
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A gorgeous little piece. Sensual and yet so innocent. The perfection of a caress in my mind
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soft skin shimmer.....dew drops dance - the alliteration works so very well to depict a picture of rose petals after rain, the words caress - just life a rose being dragged across skin
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Beautiful, very beautiful, i like red roses.
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sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet stuff! I loved it...it really runs deep although it's only a few lines thanks for sharing. byebye
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Gregg...this is just BEAUTIFUL. You've captured the essence of the rose in such few words - wow, I am in awe. I love roses, but I have to admit my favorite flower is the pink Stargazer lily. Best of luck in the contest.
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very soft and sweet. memories of soft skin and sweet kisses sprang like an artesian well within my mind.
regards
Leo Long
ps....... my wife says she'd rather see yellow roses..lol
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