(You wake up)
I can see your curiosity
(You stand up)
And I know what you're doing
The windows are painted
The door bolted shut
Blindfolding you from the world
(You can't see)
Anything on the outside
(All you know)
Are the walls and the floor
Isolated and Segregated
From freedom and everything
All those pains you'll never know
Cuz I will never show
Isolated and Segregated
From freedom and everything
All those pains you'll never know
Cuz I will never show
(You walk over)
To the dimmed black window
(You scratch at)
The residue in hopes to see
Something to tell you
About anything
But in the end your vision-less
(Just trust me)
You do not want to know
(The horrors)
Of everything out there
Isolated and Segregated
From freedom and everything
All those pains you'll never know
Cuz I will never show
Isolated and Segregated
From freedom and everything
All those pains you'll never know
Cuz I will never show
(You wake up)
I can see your curiosity
(You stand up)
And I push you back down
Author notes
I think the song is leaning towards a heavy metal approach, unfortunately I only own an acoustic guitar. The lines in parenthesis are basically in a whisper, to let you get a feel of the song.
Written May 8th, 2004
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Very effective, well done
Oooo, scary! To me, this is about parents who control their children, or people who control the people that they say they love. The world is for living in, not escaping, and every person has a right to take his or her place in it.
Wow, that is quite an emotional response you got! Well done!
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Awesome awesome poem!! I love your style. This poem was very interesting and I just like everything about it! Keep it up!
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Hey dude, this was awsome!!! I play in a band and this is an awsome song, we dont play much heavy metal though. Hey maybe we can get to be friends on ap? Whaddya say? ok check out some of my stufs k? later
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no lol you can say its incredible, but i jsut dont like people saying it was the GREATEST EVER or what eyez said. thanks for commenting everyone! It seems that people are leaning towards this as a hostage or kidnapping, but it could be more things you know, don't base it on what others say.
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good
Nicely done. I was wondering where the speaker was. You answered it for me in the last stanza. Your poem has the feeling to it of a kidnapping or any other form of supression.
It was well written.
John -
Well i suppose i won't tell you this is incredible, i don't want my head bitten off...i don't personally think too many poems deserve applauds, however if it does then you'll get one...i do like this though, i bet it sounds wonderful with music along with it...nice job and keep it up...
take care
-Stac-
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All witness the most annoying thing. Look up one comment. If I hate anything its people who say the poem is "incredible" and "greatest I ever read" or "should be published" as this comment. But in the end you know they are lying because they DON'T APPLAUD THE POEM. In that way you are obviously showing that you didn't even read the poem to get a meaning, you skimmed through, made a hasty comment just to get points and will never remember the poem again. Nice job to all you cockbites like this, sorry eyez, no offense but i'd rather have you insult me than do this
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Hopefully one day i will hear this song published? Its really good. And the ending part was just great, i think that was my favorite. great write i want to read more like this..
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awesome
Great writing! This is a depressing but oh-so-true poem. You're really 13? Kudos! You must be some kind of poetical prodigy. This was a very deep piece and I like how it makes you think.
Wonderful work!
Keep 'a writing!
**Dil
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This is good. It reminds me of a movie i saw yesterday , "the girl with the pearl earring " for some reason. This person seems to want to see the world but some force will not let them. Very nicely done. Thanks for the kind comment on my poem.. Pen on.
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Yea good point, I guess it could have many meanings, but I think I'm going to keep what I meant it to be to myself, it makes the reader think more and makes the poem more interesting
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interesting perspective!
It almost if...
either one being lied to
or an overprotective person is influencing someone here...
or one is fighting the demons within...
as they are being lied to.
that's how I see this!
I did enjoy this...
as I read this out loud
to understand this perspective!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
great write! i loved it... that last line was my favorite
~*Poesia *~
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