A somber mellow resonance of bow on cello’s string
The softly sensuous melodies which sea-bound sirens sing.
The haunting hollow echoing of oboe’s reedy call
The mystic moods of music, my soul embraces all
A sweet soliloquy of sound, soprano’s aria soars
Piano’s pulsing rhapsodies, in captivating scores
Trumpets sound triumphantly, in thirds they ring on high
My lilting heart joins in the song, which calls for soul’s reply
The rousing rhythms stir that soul, raising it to life
The counter-melodies collide in loud harmonic strife
The cymbals clash together now in dissonant crescendo
Followed by the silence of complete diminuendo.
The heart and soul o'er come by it express in their delight
The rapture that they both do feel, o'er whelmed by sound and sight.
Author notes
Had fun writing this - thanks to Darianna for her excellent suggestion. All comments welcome.
Written May 8th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- give me your best by DoubleClick.
304 points, ended May 2, 2005, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your most eloquent Prewrite by Arrianna MacEwan.
450 points, ended February 25, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Music! by GypsyEyes.
500 points, ended May 24, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MUSIC IS LIFE!! by Bohemianwriter.
1450 points, ended May 7, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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this is a really beautiful write, the rhyme just rolls of the tongue gracefully, and how you expressed the image of music was amazing.
thank you for entering and good luck! xxx
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Simply beautiful.
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Haha, I was the last to comment on this, and tho this is anonomyzed, I know who wrote it. I can always tell. I am still in awe of your writting abilities. Love it!
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I love this! and since I am a soprano, I enjoyed that part the most . you are the best poet I have ever found on here, I think I shall but thy book and curl up by a warm hearth with a nice cup of coco..
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wow this wonderful! I am speechless! Your words are captivating! beautiful beautiful job as always. You really have a talent for this. Seriously consider being published. I would by EVERY book! *Hug*
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This is beautiful once again.
I do see that your poems are all so light and flowery-ish, which is good! Truly puts individuals in a state of peace.
Thank you for sharing.
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I really like this, even though I don't like the archaic o'er and so on. In this case, it actually works, which is unusual. (And yes, I have done that one time in my life, in a poem which can't be changed or altered easily, since it's permanently on a website). Anyway, excellent job. I enjoyed reading the interview too.
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another great write. good imagery. the rythm of the poem really kept me reading.
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Congratulations on the gold! I do love this piece. The alliterations are beautifully done and the flow is superb. A much deserved win.
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Congrats on the well-deserved gold for this excellent work - a true expression of music put into words.
Best wishes,
Moses -
Paul,
This is the first poem of yours I've read.. I've read only stories up to this point and I was, in all honesty, blown away. Like I mentioned to you earlier, anyone that can incorporate crescendo and diminuendo into a poem is extremely talented
I love the rhyming in this and it flows so nicely.. Extremely well done =)
Becca -
Your a great writer with great talent and this write shows that! you once again have written on a subject that is so hard to express---you have captured it well and have espressed the thoughts in all but so many words! i like your choice of words that you've used to get the point over! Keep it up and never give up--------God Bless-Eli
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I think you've captured your subject very well. Third stanza is a little choppy but other than that...well done.
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Beautiful, this conjured up my love for music. Your rhyming didn't seem forced at all, with lovely desctriptions, it left me feeling all melodic and happy after reading.
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Great again. I dont know what else to say. I am running out of compliments....
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EXCELLENT! REALLY ENJOYED IT!
"The heart and soul o'er come by it express in their delight
The rapture that they both do feel, o'er whelmed by sound and sight" This is how I felt reading this wonderful poem! Very nicely done..almost like a song!
<3 Maureen
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My opinion, if anything, would be that it's overpacked with adjectives and description.
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I only suggested 4 words!!! But thankyo for the mention! HUGGLES...this is bookmarked! Dari xxxx
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*bows*
oh wow. this was amazing!! it could be the music of someone's life, the story of everything they were. beautiful, i could almost hear it. -
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Being a musician, I can totally relate to this piece, and how music touches the soul is so pure. I definately appreciate this piece to the heart. Wow, I wish I could write as well as you, I'm quite an amateur. Music touches all, and with your words, I could hear the cellos playing,the escalation of the piece begin and suddenly end with a clash, as it slowly ends to nothing....and one is left content.. OH I LOVED IT! -
everything comes together here so nicely. a little different from your usual style, but still I can tell it is you. excellent piece...
Lea -
Excellent sounds, rhythm, everything. Very impressive and well-done!
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WOW! GP, you came a long way with this. It looks great Funny how four lines can turn into such a fabulous piece. Great Job!
Tons Of Love
Seraph
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