Sound
the depths
that ring a bell
Fall into the
Blue
To seek and find
the piece you lost
that proved the
True
Upside
down
Back to front
Inside out
and sideways
scored
The List
(to port or
starboard?)
of pages torn
and burdens borne
If Life could
fill a
Cup
Now
which way
is
Up?
Author notes
"It is not the beginning of the end, nor the end of the beginning;
it is the beginning of the middle of both ends."
~ Charles St. George
The ultimate paradigm & 'Catch 22' of Wisdom:
"Answer not a fool according to his folly,
Lest you be like him yourself.
Answer a fool according to his folly,
Lest he be wise in his own eyes."
Proverbs 26:4-5
Written May 7th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Peculiar, Unique, Brilliant, or dont f***ing bother by Saaara.
800 points, ended October 16, 2004, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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if life could fill a cup now which way is up? you gave me something to think about...
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Woah, amazing metaphor here..each word filled with so much wisdom in it. I had to reread it a couple of times to grasp all of it.
Very well done
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Thanks Yem!
Yep, that 'Grail' thing is an intangible thing, of the mind and spirit. Like my favourite Aussie poet wrote in 1914:
"Life's wot yeh make it; an' the bloke 'oo tries
To grab the shinin' stars frum out the skies
Goes crook on life, an' calls the world a cheat,
An' tramples on the daisies at 'is feet."
~From "The Mooch O' Life" by C.J. Dennis
~G
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There was a contest for symbolism, darn I have this story that Iintentionally jambed in about 100 of them, lol. Well I wouldn't have won but that is never the point (and no, the spirit of competition isn't it either,) it's annoying the hosts with odd entries that they can't figure out, lol.
Well my cup is upside down, it always has been, life pours not in the cup but onto and around it. Such is my life. Sorry, that cynical thing again.
We're all on a search for that holy grail, we all seek differently for an object that differs in size and shape for each of us...and like the Knights of yore, I have a feeling this grail doesn't exist. -
Too bad, they don't have a smiley face that is scratching his head. Now I am going to stay awake all night trying to decide if I am spending my life filling my cup, or pouring it out. Thanks Maatkara! I see that you are still blessed with your unique style, I am glad. Walking through your poems is like a walk in an enchanted forest. You never know what magically amazing thing is going to appear!
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Great
This is amazing! I love this piece, I was drawn here by the group that the both of us are in, and I was astonished at the fantastic work I found. Perfect for the group and for the knowledge of life!!
Thanks for sharing, beautiful job!
Purplerose
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Thanks Karen!
Just seemed so apt for the Three of Cups group reading list...
~ G
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This is lovely! My favorite lines are:
"To seek and find
the piece you lost
that proved the
True"
I feel as though I am always looking for that piece. This is quite magical! -
aww this is very neat
almost like a riddle but more in depth
p.s. i love youre authors page
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Thank you for your comment, F M, much appreciated!
~ G
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Excellent
Hi Maatkara this is an original poem... I love the way you presented it... and the picture and color of background just fit the mood so very well... nice job
thanks for entering my contest... I will provide a comment for you submission as soon as the contest ends... good luck
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Awesome Stunning Divine Breathless
which way is UP? Profound.
Your image captured me immediately
I love the shadow of her silhouette lingering behind the Holy Grail
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life is life , . . no up, no down just life
not water that can be poured to make the cup only half full. . or some may say half empty? . .but i reckon. .
. .lol
it is both .
very thought provoking
Edited on Sep 11, 11:49 p.m. because 'spelling . . ahhhhhhhhhhh lol'. -
This is nonsensical read backwards
lol. Just having fun, being stupid. This is very deep. How true this fits our search in life,and so many die never knowing. I amglad you pointed this out to me. As usual like many of your writings, the true response to the poem can not be written in a comment.
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Thank you for your great comment and applause, M!
I actually added the first stanza about a month ago (for a contest). If you look at the grail you can see the two faces forming the paradigm. It is supposed to be a picture of Lundy Island, Isle of Avalon (off the coast of Wales & North Devon).
~ G
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Wonderful!
I'm seeing puns everywhere, which double and redouble the meaning. "Seeking and finding the piece I lost" has been in my own writing these days. Sounding the depths is important work.
The picture is very interesting, especially the half-reflection of the woman's face. I wonder if it is a real place, the island seems very long and flat! Oak trees are among my favorites, for the way they transmitted sunlight during one special morning's sit.
Thanks for directing me to a second look!
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This is very nicely done...very thought provoking and tickles the brain... very enjoyable to read. thank you for the entry.
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These words are more than a pun; a riddle perhaps referring to the enigmatic, abstract reality that is just behind the limits of our scope. We still have sooo much to learn in life. I will take this into my dreams and see if I can figure it out there Thank you!
Chris -
nicely done,,,,,,as always you potray emotion well,,,havent been around in abit,,,glad to see yur stil writting,still wakin up this morning,,but that was as good piece to start off with lol,,be well,,RW
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The rhyming made it flow and I love teh thought behind it. good job.... puns are cool
peace and love
Susan
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Thanks M Hehe I always liked puns, they have sacred roots, in hieroglyphs etc. Shame they now have associations with mostly silly jokes.
~ G
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Deeper than it looks!
This is very thought provoking, since the way that we are told is "up" so often turns out to be self-serving manipulation and not good for us at all. There is a lot of confusion before we hold out our cups to be filled.
I like the pun on List, but that's me!
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I am never quite sure "which way is up"...but I do know this is up high on my list of good things to read ..I like the simplicity and the message..write on ...I will read ...freda
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This is really cool - it is light, yet it gives me something to ponder. I liked the little touches of rhyme - really gave the poem rhythm. nicely done.
Scott
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