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Longing Hearts
search others'
words
for glimpses
of themselves
And for a moment
to pretend,
like trying on
some clothes,
that if
it fits
it is
for them
And maybe
they'll be
found
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Written May 7th, 2004
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unique
I loved this lol..it was very different for you. I enjoyed it lol. It's so unique! 
Kari -
Implied in this beautiful poem is that large ocean of people who fail "to connect".
About comments I see here and elsewhere from time to time: Life here is real! As real as going through the motions , sometimes, in home-life. Correction: more real!
Ron.
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Thank you!
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I liked this very much. Short, simple, well structured (as far as free-form can be structured) I look forward to reading more in future contests or elsewhere on the site. Good luck
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And some of those clothes fit so good as if they were made special for us
So true, so true dear Ge...
Kisses and love,
Mari
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"One can only be in awe of the amazing way this poem touches the emotions of love, and percussions of the heart. Wonderfully written.
Best wishes,
Saurabh."
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"Oh, Gennelle, this is beautiful. Here you have most of them crying, and Yem is cursing his head off. Goodness! And you called me a suck up. Shame on you for reaching into everyone's poor pitiful heart and giving them such a hearty squeeze--mine included. Wonderful write. Hugs, Patricia ."
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Yemassee (im) made a comment on Small Blessings (reply):
"Damn, damn, damn you. Sorry to swear but this thing hit home like a blunt pipe to the noggin. Not only that but you've hit upon the real reason why most of us are on AP. We're not here to be famous writers, sure some are, and others may have that as a secondary ambition, but the real reason is to connect with some other soul, at some level or another. Do I think my little clown and puppet stories have any great merit? No, I just like the interaction between me and whoeverreads it. I work at a job where I'm completely different from everyone, so this is where I come to try to find a couple people who don't live to drink beer and talk about v8 engines.
And of course in real life we do the same thing--search others minds for that spark of similarity.
Well I haven't been found yet (as you mention) but maybe no one is looking for a harmless, slightly insane, guy who writes about Talking animal satires, lol.
Damn, damn, damn you!"
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This is a very nice peice of work. Keep it up!
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“Fools give you reasons
Wise men never try”
I have penned quite a lot on the theory of twin souls
This has been my life quest
As we unfold our very best
And I kiss you within one breath of timelessness
You know your true reflection deep within your soul
You just know
This is from a song on the wings of the wind
I penned such a long time ago
A prophecy came true
“Isn’t life strange”?
LIFE SO TRUE
Now do you see
How potent we are?
You and I
Twin iridescent stars
Today we as us the chosen ones
An honour and a daunting task
HAVE YOU BEEN HERE WITH ME BEFORE
Were not living in a flash back
Today I see Mother Nature had her way
The quakes that continue to shake your land
TODAY I'M THINKING HEAVILY ABOUT IT
Tomorrow I understand who I am
Angelic signs tell you and me
What our love is meant to be
What our love is meant to be
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this is a very good poem.. it is very captivating
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OMG I love your poetry it's so cool this is so awesome I can't get enough of it! That's it you are going on my favorites list!! Please write more SOON!
Kayla -
Geeze I can't afford to feel liek this right now. Your poetry is so damn amazing!
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in the mirror
I search for glimpses
of myself
Don -
The concept of twin souls I intuitively understood and believed to be true, but you have allowed me to take it into my awareness by a comment you made on a comment I made to another poem. I believe it to be among the main principles of our existence in space and time; we are not whole when we have not found our soulmate, not able to tap into the essence of the source of power that is bestowed on us. This poem is a confirmation I feel, of the knowledge we need to have to pass measure and time successfully. I enjoy absorbing your wise contributions here in AP! Thank you.
Chris -
Thank you, Nicolette And thank you so much for the 'typo alert'
(fancy my missing that!) Your suggestion of "ourselves" is good, but I would have to change it from third person plural to first person plural throughout.
Love,
~ Gennelle
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Thought-provoking with depth!
As always the constuction of your poem is interesting and the economy of words so effective - but the content speaks volumes! Such a relevant subject you've painted here so well in words...looking for the poem, the collection of words that fits the inner-self..a small blessing to be cherished - a mirror to look deeper. Lovely work my friend! (Just one small thing: I think there is a typing error in the 5th line "ourselves" it should be). Thanks for sharing your heart and intellect! -
Sweet Treat Of A Read :)
Hey small blessings!
Thanks for passing your blessing. I got a song along that line. You said that so elegantly beautiful!
Been there and the tunnel is still long but now I'm strong.
Tommy -
"longing hearts search others'words for glimpses of themselves"
Perfect! I wish I were as good at such poetic definition. In a single sentence, you state succinctly how people rely on others to define themselves. -
Well done
I like this poem very much! I have that experience too, of trying on other poets' words to see if they fit, calling out to hear if there is an echo. We love to be in company, and how much better when it is GOOD company!
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this is very cool...how do I make a rose on my keyboard???If I knew I would certainly leave you a dozen ...freda
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This is a familiar theme. i have explored it myself. Your economy with words is admirable - I sure wish others would learn from it. Really good. Thanks
Scott
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Yes, SegerFan, I think you captured it pretty well Looking for the reflection of your being, through another's eyes, words etc.
Thank you, for your thoughtful analysis.
~ G
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sure! my interpretation of what it means is that sometimes we can see ourselves in others expressions (poetry)... I think the clothes analogy is hard to describe but i see it as like trying on clothes until you find that perfect fitting pair of jeans - just like the perfectly worded poem which fits your inner thoughts - if that makes sense .. i could be wrong but thats what it says to me!
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Thank you SegerFan!
~ G
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well you poem sounds interesting, i didn't really catch the point, maybe i need to read into it some more. But maybe you could put in a few extra lines to connect all the idea's in your poem. I think if you be interesting to hear what SegarFan thinks it means, just out of curiosity, because he commented that he understood it. thanks for sharing to poem with us all at all poetry!!!!!
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I think this poem gets the meaning across just perfectly the way it is!
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Dragonsblood ~ I'm sorry you didn't quite 'get' the flow, form or message. My lines, breaks and layout are all, as always, carefully and consciously chosen. Thank you for the comments.
~ Ma'atkara
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Intersting how you related love or lost souls without love to be like clothes or trying on clothing when they search for love. Your phrasing seems out of order though, the rythm doesn't really fit. ry maybe to word it with a little more of a power word boost. You can find "power words" info online through a search engine like google. Some of your sentances are comma'd and finished at odd places in the middle of a line, maybe try ending the lines at these marks or complete a thought to a line rather than split a thoguht between 4 or 5 lines. You then feel a deeper meaning to these words and you can really.. prove... what you are meaning in this lovely poem.
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interesting style, I like Great job!
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awwwwwwwwww. I like this poem a lot. Bravo! Great write
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