my version of “Free At Last”
I was afraid and lonely
learning to live on my own;
my existence had grown shallow
and my heart had turned to stone.
You helped renew my spirit;
you rejuvenated my soul;
you breathed life into my heart again
and your presence made me whole.
You left without a warning.
You found someone you needed more,
but then you’d make a phone call
and come to visit at my door.
I lived amidst confusion
not knowing what you’d do next.
You lived for you and your moments
oblivious to their effects.
I have grown and flourished
and I’ll cherish the times we shared,
but I am moving forward,
regardless of how much I cared.
If you ever think of me,
let my memories bring a smile
But my heart is not imprisoned
like it was for such a while.
So forget about my heartaches;
You wiped away my fears.
You launched me toward tomorrow
and the next one hundred years.
Remove my number from your book.
Obliterate my name.
If ever we should meet again,
it would never be the same.
Erase me from your future;
rub out memories of my past;
delete me from your daydreams,
and set me free at last.
m
Author notes
I found this today - something scribbled on a pad and forgotten...I suppose I really don't want my memories totally forgotten - but wrapped up in gold foil...and cherished.... but I want them to remain memories, and not current affairs.
Written May 6th, 2004
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I have missed you
It has been to long and it is all my fault. But I am glad that I came back today to read this. It is beautifully written, (as always), and speaks of the feelings of the heart so clearly yet so gently.
Thank you m
Take every care,
Sammy
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memories reach & touch those places
that make us smile
where people & events
somehow matter most!
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
Another powerful write M..the meter and rhyme really add to the strength of the poem and what you're conveying!! Sometimes we do need those memories.. a little bit of past sweetness engages the heart, but they also offer as a reminder of where we need to stand in order to keep our strength, independance and dignity. I'm really enjoying reading your latest posts.. they have so much strength in them..thank you for sharing!!!
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Wow, this is very good. I loved how everything went together so nicely. Really beautiful. Great job!
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This is wonderful
I love your poetry, it is so real
and refreshingly beautiful.
FifthDove
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Hi M, this so excellently written that I would not have a clue as to how to make it any better and won't try. It may not be perfect, but then again it may, because it is definitely a good one. I really enjoyed it.
Damon D. Brewer -
superior
Love can be such a chain... and one that is so hard to break. It looks like you have finally broken free, and not only with your words, but also with your heart. Now I need lessons... This is a poem that many can relate to. So many of us have bonds that we form of our own souls, bound by memories of our hearts. If you can make this a reality, you have finally become the woman you were meant to be. I obviously love this one! -
This is really beautiful! I loved the release this poem offers.I am ganna have to read more.You are very talented!
Tammy33
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Beautiful, simply beautiful. Good flow, rhythm, and throughout the entire poem. The emotion is amazing, ahh... to be free at last. It's so hard to let go sometimes and other times we want so badly to remember, but the moment, the image slips through our mind like the dream you had last night; the more you try and remember the more your memory of it fades. Wonderful write here, honestly. Keep 'em coming! ~Erin~
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Your declaration of independence (so to speak) was a pleasure to read.
Well done! What a wonderful feeling to be free at last!
Maureen
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I lived amidst confusion
not knowing what you’d do next.
You lived for you and your moments
oblivious to their effects.
I really enjoyed this stanza. The write over all was good, as well. This stanza just spoke so clearly. Good job.
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yes this is a great write,
letting go is so very difficult yet so very empowering,
keep walking tall
lisa x -
Yes yes....I do enjoy this....this is fabulous work...simply fabulous. Woohoo...
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Joins Wolfbane in applause Wow amazing so much thought and emotion went through this, wow just wow, I can't say more then that. this is excellent, claps for you. Great job, keep it up, thanks for sharing.
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Hey. Wow....that was really good. It flowed really well. I'm actually at a loss for words. This was amazing. The words you chose were perfect, and fit very well together. And it connected and flowed, I didn't stumble anywhere. The rhymes were perfect. This is an awesome poem. Keep it up. Have a wonderful evening.
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stands up and applauds -- This is outstanding! The flow is perfect and the emotion is so strong. Actually the strength and reality of this poem is just excellent. I can relate to well to this, a little too well, if ya know what I mean LOL Definately one of my fave pieces of yours for sure hun. Very well done
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