Awakened
in this world,
alone
but for the embrace
of a loving Father.
Mere blocks of stone,
waiting to be shaped
by the delicate hands
of our Creator.
Eroded,
over time
by pain,
and the chilling winds
of seeming indifference,
yet every pebble
violently chipped away,
is done so
by carefully calculated blows
from an omniscient,
and eternally wise
master Sculptor.
Layers of cold marble,
slowly,
and painstakingly
carved away,
to reveal
angelic forms
imprisoned within,
and when at long last,
the final shard is gone,
and the Artist,
finally satisfied,
we are ready,
to ascend.
Author notes
Had to write this. Our pain in life serves to shape us into the person God wishes us to be. A sculpture isn't created, but uncovered from a block of stone.
Written May 6th, 2004
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wow this poem is very powerful. it really makes you think. good job!!!!!!!!
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even better, great.
man i thought your over poem was good this one is better! it has everything! sarow, hope, love, depresion. i really think that this poem is one of the best i'v ever read, and thats saying a lot, but mostly because along with the sadness and the depression, the sarow, and the feeling of being only clay, theres hope that someday we'll be better for the pain, not many poems have that. really great job. i think my fav part of your poem was, "alone
but for the embrace
of a loving Father."
that part was so good. keep up the good work.
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I wrote something in a way like that, well not quite. I love the way you compare us to mere blocks of stone just waiting to be shaped. and the angelic forms imprisoned within. keep it up!! -
On this I agree...
people are shaped by their experiences
through a daily journey...
what may happen is up to them
in the journey that they take.
I did enjoy this!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill -
Ok, cliche ahead. I don't consider myself "religious" but spiritual. I don't believe in organized religion. Your relationship (if you so choose to have one) with God should be your own. You don't need anyone else to tell you what God wants of you, or to speak to him for you, that is just crazy. I wouldn't call myself Christian, really, although I do believe Jesus Christ was a real person. There is a lot of exaggeration, and myth surrounding him, though. Regardless if you believe he died for you or not, I believe he was a good role model. He preached nothing but love, and anyone who has love in his heart for his fellow man is a good person in my book.
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Okay if you don't mind me asking what religion are u because by this piece it seems like your religion is christian based. It isn't so much to be forgiven and shed our old skin for new, but to forgive others so that they can find true peace.
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Wow.
great write. I find that your style is simliar to mine, (except mine are too long). You portray your version of God very well. I enjoyed reading your poem.
I myself am not overly religious, but I do believe in some omipotent, omniscient being. (scientifically, there has to be a God, odd as that may sound) anyway, I wanted to compliment you on your imagery and diction. The words were aptly placed to deliver a strong message.
Great job!
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And a fine work you are, if this is anything to go by. A beautiful spiritual write. Fantastic choice of imagery, form and analagy. Pain chips away, as you said, and shapes us... it can be hard to trust in God (or in my case, Goddess being Wiccan)when it seems that They are being cruel and heartless, but everything has its place and purpose. Superb. Very impressed.
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I'm not an artist, just an aspiring writer. God is the artist, I am his work.
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this is indeed , a good piece..great imagery and beautiful phrases ..I am impressed ..freda
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Beautiful. Are you an artist?
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A sculpture isn't created, but uncovered from a block of stone.
Wow. Yes you really conveyed an amazing image in this poem and the message you brought out was very true to life. If it wasnt for the pain and betrayel I felt in this one exprerience, I wouldnt have been reconnected with my writing. Now, I aspire to be a writer and dont go a day without writing. I have all that because of a crappy situation. Great write! -
i dont usually like the overtly spiritual or religious stuff - but i do like the imagery you have used and think it has taken that imagery that can work on more than one level as it has power and substance in its own right.. thanks for sharing
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