By Gregg Rowe
All that lives must die
--SHAKESPEARE
Even though each society has:
Its own ideas;
Its own religion;
Its own way of studying scientific problems;
Its own biological changes;
Its own form:
in
God
Art
Government
Entertainment
ing
Nature itself does not change
We, as humans, are:
Born
Age
Die
And in between
We engulf our environment
Create and destroy
Author notes
Mores
Written May 5th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- The Constitution: God in Government? by Glacian.
400 points, ended January 5, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Every dynasty or civilization has ended in violence either by man or nature. If the latter would not have done the job, man would surely have done so at one point in time. All changes man goes through on a larger scale are violent. There seems to be an innate urge to destroy in man, at least the ones who are in charge of the rest. The dreadful demise of this era seems impending, inevitable and violent yet again. We just passed the eight year mark to the end of this world when the sun and earth align with the center of this universe. Great write and good luck in the contest. Take care,
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I have to tell you: don't be mad at me.
I'm initially inclined to dismiss acrostics as a device - too rigid and the down/across thing too blundering in its nature to really be subtle poetry.
However, I was, with complete seriousness, impressed with what you did with the rigid form. I particularly liked the middle acrostic with the rest of the word around the edges. And something about that acrostic was inherently impressive in its bitter taste.
The first part was too stilted for me, though I can see the dignity of the formal tone.
And the fragment at the end is an excellent, jutting counterpoint to the in-your-faceness of the acrostic beforehand (acrostics are always in your face, but i guess that can be part of a larger pattern as well).
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Very creative write. Short and sweet. I liked it and it kinda fits the word I've been having people use which is cool considering its a prewrite. Good work and thanks for entering.
God Bless,
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This is a very interesting piece, certainly very original and in a unique form. You make a strong statement in a eloquent way. A very good poem, good luck in my contest!
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This was amazing because it reads on extra levels than a plain acrostic. The right words are emphasized and are described in perfect relation to the topic and keep right on track. I think I'm beginning to like more and more of these poems I see that filter off from an idea or quote stated by someone famous first. It gives the poem something extra like a little spice. And the message in this couldn't be more truer! "Hey humans... Leave those trees alone!!!"(and what not) Great poem Gregg!!!
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You had a very creative set up here, the acrostics were a nice touch. This may have been a very basic poem but it had a deeper meaning and thought to it. It looks like you took awhile to set this up or atleast that you put great thought into it. It was very different from most poems that I have read which is probably why I like it the more I read it. Great job on this and nice picture by the way, it ties in nicely. Thank you for entering my contest. Peace. ((Shadow-dweller))
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excellent and inventive
The form of this is exquisite. I was drawn to read and reread it several times over...and the form pleased more with each reading. The message is nothing new, but the delivery is so fresh that it gives new life to it. And, for all its age, the moral of your story is one we never seem to learn. It will, I think, destroy us in the end. Thanks for this wonderful piece, and best of luck in the contest.
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Wonderful piece Gregg. It took my a while to think about it, and to come up with something to say, and i am still pretty much speechless. It's nice how you have the Acronyms, it places a lot of meaning onto the words. I enjoyed how fragmented it was, at each stop, it gives the reader time to think about what they just read, then make a connection to the next part. Thank you for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
! Cheers. Daniel.
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Magnificent - A Must Read!
Powerful piece! I love the format of this, the creativity, as well as the truth and conviction herein. Sometimes I think we all live behind the "we are only human" clause. Which seriously, in my opinion, just sucks, LOL. We do things that seriously make no sense sometimes. What happened to 'live and let live' and 'brotherly love', hell what happened to 'common courtesy'? And then there are the things we do to destroy the very earth on which we live, acting as if we own it, instead of feeling like we are privaleged to live upon it and try and care for it. Would we treat our homes (houses) in such a manner? NO! Grrr, I should shut up now before I start venting on humanity and of course my own flaws (oh yeah, I have them, plenty of them lol). A very awesome write!!! A winner in my book for sure. Best of luck in the contest!
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I would tend to agree on you in many aspects, yet disagree in others. Promotion of poetry while it is in a contest enables me to see the errors of the writing or to clear up mixed metaphors from the comments received. It also allows me to challenge myself as a writer. While most of my poetry has been well thought out and continues to evolve because I believe a poem is never finished, it just takes a rest.
I love to enter in these contests that have subjects and themes I do not normally write about, expanding my horizons in the world of poetry. From the time I take a look at the blank sheet (yes, I still write my poetry out by pen first before putting it on the computer) until the thought has been pernned, is the challenge. And yet, even after the challenge has been met, the poem has been penned, you sit back and read it, look at the form and think of the similes and metaphors and just shake your head and walk away saying There is still room for growth. Gregg
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it is true, throughout civilization, nations have come and created and then been destroyed, basically because we fail to see what we do to ourselves. and that is indeed bad.
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I really hate trying to comment on contest poems, I know, I am guilty of promoting mine as well. The reason I don’t like to comment is they are usually a bit contrived aren’t they? I mean to say they are written to a task, the contest. Yeah the creativity is there, but not usually to the extent of other poems that are worked out over time. And yet there comes a contest that so sparks something that was lying, smoldering in the back of the mind and the competition ignites the imagination to such and extent as to produce a forest fire of radiance. I have always loved the intensity of the broken line. Here is no exception. The contest aside, this is a brilliant poem. The combination of acrostic and line enhance and enliven the already potent content. As a social commentary it is, for me, right on. Brilliant, simply brilliant, ~ricahrd
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*raises an eyebrow*
interesting...
certainly it is true that all creation must be destroyed.
I wonder what you are pointing towards here.
You say nature does not change even with all our problems and discrepncies, does it make us unimportant however? insufficiant in some way?
We as humans, are we truly"bad", is there even such a distinction possible anywhere other than the human mind? Good and Evil, right and wrong...bad... are all human concepts are they not? and just as transient as we are?
So does it really make a difference in the end?
Great poem, loved it. It made me thik.
L8RZ!!!
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its the equation...life and death..equal yet opposite...nature could be the environment...but not always the case...we as human..create and destroy through opinions..a clash of ideas...nature is just a part of that cycle...in any case...all that lives must die......well..i like the format and the picture...i dont if i agree or not with the poem..lol..though, sorry...but..that doesnt matter...because...it was well written..and i enjoyed the read!
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Nice. Very nice. I loved the style. Had to focus to read it. It seems it can be read several ways, changing the order in which you pick the words. I like it. And, i like the view of societies in it. An emphasis on the not so good part, but, a true part. Very nicely done. Good luck wit' the contest.
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