Last Words
Her hands were so cold
as the knife pinched her skin,
she knew this was it,
her final sin.
She never wanted it to end this way,
but there was no point in living a lie,
her soul had already died.
As she said her final prayers
and drew the knife high,
she drove it into her skin.
She fell to the floor
in her own pool of blood.
Seconds before her soul was set free,
she mummered the words, "I'm Sorry."
Author notes
Hey this is a piece I wrote a long time ago and I was really depressed at the time. I still am depressed but not as much. Anyway, I hope you like it!
Written October 13th, 2003
A contest entry
- Depressing anger poems. by Dark Angel 89.
300 points, ended May 24, 2004, 83 entries
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THis poem is so deep and I love it I have been in this position so many times and never really felt the words to express it and you did and awesome job
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great work
Deep and emotional write you have in this short piece..
The "Im sorry" at the end captivated my thoughts..and the point that Her soul was already dead and at the end "set free" ..Great Job
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lol brokendarkness!! ya this is great tho! I really do like it, i hope to see more of ur work, cuz if this is ur type of writeing... then this could be ur career! lol its good enough! lol not its better then enough!! lol
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WOW! omg my F****en GOD! this is a fricken kick butt poem dude! i wish i was this good! you should put this is some poet compation i know that you will win! omg fricken lord i cant get over it! luvs plus not bunches of hugs -
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I think it shows emotion in a way that only poems can. Some people can't acheive it but I think you have, good job.
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this is a really sad poem but it is amazing
its a really good write, id like to read more of your stuff -
Please tell me what you think and tell me the honest truth! BE HARSH, NOT NICE!!!
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