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Grass

Spring tears
banish bunnies.
grasses scent

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April showers, all through May
Written May 4th, 2004

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  • May 8, 2004
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    This is a really good distilled moment. Lovely.
    Bunnies are nice.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    May 6, 2004
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    Very nicely done!
    The capital on the first and the punctuation on the second line aren't necessary in a haiku;
    Besides that, a fine haiku you have here!
    Thanks and best of luck!
    Mari

  • Shannon
    May 4, 2004
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    mmm the sweet smell of grass. Loved this. "banish bunnies" brilliant