by Gregg Rowe
with a Doberman pincher
a whale of a time
chasing pigeons
silver moon sets
upon the black lagoon
lemon sunlight kisses
upon the turquoise waters
dolphins dance
under shooting stars
caught in my country river
rainbow trout
fail to reach the sea
opaque turns grey
summer morning sun
designs purple maze
in cattail grass
raindrop eyes
a rabbit stares
Author notes
Moonsparrow
Written May 3rd, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Haikus and Limericks (An Interesting Combination) by Learning To Cope.
300 points, ended April 17, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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It's not easy making words on a list fit together, but you did it well. My favorite part was lemon sunlight kisses. Great line!
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This is most excellent. I love the animated unicorn at the top. Your words, once again, paint such lovely images for the mind. What else can I say? My favorite line was
lemon sunlight kisses
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Very nicely and well done!
I liked this serie!
Thanks for the entry and best of luck!
Mari
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my cat is staring at your dog - must of seen lunch lol arr haiku. i always like them in series though what do i know
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lol at dp robertson above.....i don't care for the style myself--but from a purely selfish standpoint--since this formerly now a confessional i'll say it --its cuz i can't write the damn things :-$ hell i can barely even write readable "poems"-- at any rate --best of luck in the contest
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Much better
hehehhehe yeppp.. ahhh calm and tranquility.. yeppp
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Here you are Gilles: thanks for your advice on my bg,s; sometiems as an artist I tend to get carried away
allpoetry.com/Poem/613853
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Well there might be a half dozen.. but they aren't cheap.. infact they are solid and substanstial.. well penned Gregg..
But one thing..
The background is a bit busy.. sorta distracts from the poetry.. hope you don't mind me saying that
GOOD LUCK WITH THE CONTEST
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i love that last one!!! you have done well with that challenge...great job and good luck!!! i love haiku and i love love what youve done here! great job!!
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By the way, before I rip into you can I just say how impressed I am with your other stuff that you highlighted. They are brilliant. Now let me make a confession- I am a bigoted, prejudiced man- there I said it and feel better for having said it. I hate haikus!! In fact I think I would rather read a fortune cookie...nay I would rather be subjected to the poetic bricks in Survivor than having to read haikus.
upon the turquoise waters
dolphins dance
under shooting stars
What a lovely bit of writing- very similar to a birth, saying what a beautiful baby, shit I wish my kid was born with a body as well. It was my mistake as I accidently clicked on the to Lord of the Rings poetry magic - ready to sit down to a banquet and have been served a very small can of lovely sardines. Fuck I hate haikus. I am sure they were invented during an ink shortage. They say it is one of the oldest forms of poetry.
"Did you see what Korg scribbled in the sand!!!"
By the way, blowing down a Didgeridoo is one of the oldest forms of music and that bores me shitless after a while too to the point where I kind of glad music has evolved.
David
PS I am hoping that is Alice in Wonderland holding a flamingo not what I first thought, some young deviant banging something on the endangered species list. If you could somehow do something that involved that prancing unicorn, Alice and the bird I may be tempted to overlook how much I loath this poetry form.
By the way I did enjoy the other poems and I do feel better now that I have confided in you.
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YOu have created a little slice of heaven with your beautiful and imaginative poem.
I love the lines
"silver moon sets
upon the black lagoon
lemon sunlight kisses"
Well done !!
Abbie XX -
Terrific
Wow. I'm amazed.. These are fantastic haikus and I love your title and your background. Alice in Wonderland is one of my many all time favourite books.
Excellent work. You've captured a picture in time with your words. Not a one was wasted.
Blessings,
Absinthe
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This was great. I am not laughing at your poem. I thought that this was a great collection of Haikus, and this came about from a list words too. I was actually laughing at the title because it reminded me of a western that my father, god blessed his soul, you to watch, and brought back memories of him sitting in front of the screen laughing at the villians when they fell in the dirt pushing up roses. Anyway, awesome write mentor. As I always, keep penning!!
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