Club Rendezvous
Yes I do love the Club Rendezvous
For it is there that I first saw you
With your voice so sultry and sweet
As you sang to a mellow blues beat
I’ve never been able to figure out
What my infatuation was all about
Prettier women I have often seen
Heard voices more clear and clean
Maybe the sexy aura you emitted
Held me captive, totally committed
Oblivious to the abounding noise
I’m enthralled with your sexy poise
On your break you went to the bar
As I sat and admired you from afar
You felt my eyes on your neck I bet
Then you turned and our eyes met
Feeling chills as they ran up my spine
I so wanted to ask you to be mine
Your look was steady, your eyes rapt
Maybe you knew that I was entrapped
You came to my table and sat down
And I could see your eyes are brown
Seeing I was shy you spoke first
And I thought my heart would burst
I saw you looking while I’m on stage
And suddenly felt free from my cage
Your eyes invaded my whole being
And my heart went weak with feeling
Were you really that enamored of me
If not, it’s entirely heartbroken I’ll be
You paused to give me space to speak
I tried but my voice was low and weak
I am just a country boy and very shy
But I wondered if you had another guy
If not would you give me a chance
Could I please have this next dance?
Your sexy body just fit my embrace
And we danced as I gazed at your face
We’re moving to the rhythm of the tune
Knowing the club will be closing soon
I hailed a cab, planning to say goodnite
But then my heart soared like a kite
When you said come home with me
The night is young, it’s only three
I’m still a country boy on the JR ranch
But ever time I get half a chance
To the Club Rendezvous I do go
Because I love that sexy singin’ gal so
I went and bought me a diamond ring
And one nite as she finishes her sing
I’ll open the box and ask her to marry me
And if she says yes; she and I will be we.
©…by jean ruff
Author notes
Whatever would we do without our fantasies??????
Image: The Buzzer Bar at the Rendzevous.
Written May 2nd, 2004
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dude....I felt like i was actually there sitting at a table at Club Rendezvous watching all this happen like i wish it was happening to me, and at the same time being happy for you and her both.....GREAT Write!!
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I was so touched by this story. I wonder was this woman your wife? You told it with such grace. God bless you
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Thanks for your comment Joan. Loveya, jean
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Thanks for commenting Dee. Loveya, jean
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I apprciate your comment Violet. Sorry you didn't like the last two stanzas, they were anticlimatic, meant to sum up the whole experience. Oh well, can't please all the people all the time.
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Thanks so much for your kind comment Dawnknight. Such glowing comments will give me the big head, LOL. Yet, I love them, jean
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I appreciate this comment Fate, hadn't thought of it as a song but I think you are right. Can you write the music? Thanks, jean
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Thanks for the comment and suggestions yoursbyperil
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Oh Jean, without our fantasies life would be dull indeed, wondeful my friend, you made me feel as though I was there~sigh~so romantic~Lovesya~Joan
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Fantasies make the world go 'round, Jean. What would we be without a fantasy or two in our lives now and then.
A cute write and the picture is perfect with it.
Dee
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This truly has the heart of the Romantic behind it! Do you enjoy RollingStone? I can't help but feel it uses a similar style as his. . . .but that might just be coincidental. I really felt that the rhyming was going really well, but at the end i thought it sounded forced, the two last stanza's to be exact. The rest i loved, even if rhyming isn't my cup of tea, it worked in this poem. I thihk the story is really cute and the picture at the begining really aided it in giving it that vintage, sexy bar kinda feel.
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Wow great fantasies you do have, a wonderful write indeed I enjoyed this very much. It flowed and rhymed great meter, as if I heard the club music behind. Great job, keep up the wonderful work I have read from you, and thanks for sharing again your talent with your writing peers.
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i love this peice very much reminds me of a song
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I love the concept of this piece, and how the centerpiece of it all is "Club Rendezvous"... the title alone invokes an upbeat feeling in me. Many of your rhymes were very good, but I think the lines that you used phrases like "... happy I will be" could be reworked to sound more natural and improve the flow of the piece. Also, in the first stanza you referred to the girl at the club as "you" and the last stanza you referred to her as "she", that was a little confusing but can be easily fixed. Congratulations on a great idea and a nice write
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