by Gregg Rowe
Our federal government,
Notably bent:
Had screwed my mate --
AIDS was the fate
His spirit refuses to rest;
Close to my breast:
I see my friend --
Before the end
A eccentric young man was he,
A leader free:
A heart to lend --
Courage to end
Author notes
A Minute Poem
FIRST STANZA SECOND STANZA THIRD STANZA
8 syllables a 8 syllables c 8 syllables e
4 syllables a 4 syllables c 4 syllables e
4 syllables b 4 syllables d 4 syllables f
4 syllables b 4 syllables d 4 syllables f
TOTAL 60 Syllables
I like to challenge myself with this form of poetry: to write a Minute Poem in less than five with what is going through my head at the time. A lot of rememberance of friends, but one in particular was my best friend (Claude) who passed away in 1997 from complications to AIDS, when I couldn't find an ending, his spirit directed me to my heart condition and the operation in September that I will undergo and it fit perfectly for the ending to his poem.
Written May 2nd, 2004
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Nice Work
wow, I applaud you for your flawless form. Form is defiantly not something I'm good at, but something that is still very impressing. I can see that you put a lot of time and effort into this one, a long with a lot of personal experience. Experience is everything. -
Quite a moving poem and an impressive form. One of my many gripes with the government. But it never ceases to amaze me how people live on after they've passed away. I pray that your operation will go well and that he'll continue to be with you always. Take care!
your cerulean dreamer,
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That was good. I liked it alot and i could see how it could be challenging to write. I used to write in forms a long time ago. I got tired of them and tired of deciding how i thought people should read my work so now its free verse left to be interpreted the way the reader perfers.
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I loved this. It was great. You are an absolutely amazing writer and person. This poem was amazing.
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stands up and applauds this piece This is a hell of a piece, started out like a slap in the face, a wake up call really. A hard hitter of a memory and unfortuately the truism of government. I have one word for them anymore really...Jackass'! And that's the nice one. Anway, I shall not ramble on this, it gets me to heated
I love this piece and it is quite the challenge, very impressive sir. Bravo!!! Blessings Always, Gypsy
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Once again, a very deep and emotional right coming from you Mr. Rowe. A talent like yours does not go wasted. You have expressed it quite well here and I am sorry for your loss. Your hurting emotions were clearly shown. It came across strongly.
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Hey good poem here. Lol nice line Our federal goverment
Notably bent. Also nice screen name.
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great poem, sums up all your emotion and anger an hurt. great write, keep them coming!
natazzle21
xx
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Gregg, I keep learning so much from you. This is a great writing, even though it is a painful one, I can see. Thanks for sharing. Cheryl
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Witnessing from very close while others return to eternity is a devastating experience. Even if our minds are capable to understand the spirit travels to better places, the goodbye hurts and leaves a mark that will stay with us throughout our lives. It becomes even more horrid when you find out that HIV is a lab created hybrid corona virus like SARS and Ebola, that have never been encountered before in living tissue. Over the past few years 20 of the world's leading bio-engineers have been brutally murdered, poisoned, shot or killed in dubious road accidents. All of them had been involved in the ersearch of hybrid corona virusses... Of course now it is even harder to prove the government's involvement in the creation of these virusses, but these events puts suspicion on them. Some powers in this world will not walk away from any crime to get things their way and for the personal suffering they do not care at all. The profits the companies they own make on selling drugs that give hope for a cure (while giving 10 other diseases in return simultaneously) is what they aim for. The bio-chemical industry's profits soar inspite of the world wide economic decline, because they create their own market by selling cures that cause disease as well. You wrote words that are powerful within the rigid frame of the contest rules, which is a small miracle, especially since the words flow well and the message it contains is expressed crystal clear. I wish you strength with coping with this hurtful memory and good luck in the contest. Take care,
Rage
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Ohh. Very nicely done. Stupid government. And they talk about equality. A great poem. Very moving. (god how i hate having to say that, but i don't know how else to put it) But anyway, its a great poem. ANd i mean that.
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