Once a gaze with springs soft touch
with summers warmth in green iris's
a smile so sweet and crisp not even fall could touch.
But now winter has set in those eyes
a chilling breeze has come alive
as winter settles in the night.
Lips curve to smile like a winters wind
cold and chilling unto the end.
And green eyes set with a frozen glare
so much ice a bench would bend and break.
The winter settles but it's contained
with chains and jackets it's kept away
to do no more harm than it has done
to no longer hurt anyone.
And as the days go on and on
the winter chill becomes undone.
The softness of spring begins to show
yet all too late winter has one last show.
By chains it's dragged from it's containment
forced to sit before a crowd
the winds they blast with one last strength
one last try
before winter officially goes away.
The final show now given
the drug it sets in
the freezing winter finally gone
but not before it comes undone
and started to show a gaze with springs soft touch
with summers warmth in green iris's
and then too little too late
the chilling winter has gone away.
Author notes
This poem has a hidden story behind the words... the question is if you can be one of the people who can tell me the story 
leave a comment see if your head on or not
Do you know what the hidden story is???
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excellent work!
hey baby girl...well done!
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This is a very good poem, i loved it! Thanks for entering!
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it seems like a relationship that became cold then broke up .. maybe, and the winter hour here is leaving a hurt , am i right?
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wow
the imagery is stunning i love the last stanza and the beautiful way you have written the whole poem
its has also created a dark emotion somehow
but very nicely written
keep on writing
By chains it's dragged from it's containment
forced to sit before a crowd
wow
beautiful lines!!
x
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Your piece is heartfelt and beautiful... but unfortunately you didnt follow the contest rules....
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please next time before you decide it doesn't follow rules... read my author notes thoroughly. This has a hidden story behind it and the story follows your rules the description is not in the notes for a reason as the notes clearly states.
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What does poetry have to do with rules any way?
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Very good poem! I lovd the imagery! My favorite lines from the poem are undoubtedly:
''The winter settles but it's contained
with chains and jackets it's kept away
to do no more harm than it has done
to no longer hurt anyone.''
They are AWESOME! ^^ Great poem"! Thanks for entering and best of luck ^^
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Interesting work here
I feel that we endure the brunt of winter then get teased a bit by a little bit of spring before the last frost that comes around Easter that often takes the first buds away then it spings into action for the most brillance of color of the new spring bursting forth
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This makes me think of someone that has come along and chramed you, then hurt you. The cold is what they bring to your heart but spring is seting in. You started to break through the ice that this person brought before that though. I loved this if I am gith cool if not then this is still a great poem SH
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Wow!!! It sounds very deep. I sense a bit of pain and sadness within the poem. I could be wrong but someone was maybe hurt by another?
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