Please don't stop loving me
the way that you do
You have made all of
my dreams come true
It seems like you are trying
to go your own way
I have to figure out
how I can make you stay
I don't want to know
via second hand news
that my love is the chain
wrapped around you like a noose
Oh daddy cries our children
they don't want you to leave
you make loving fun for us
but from me you need a reprieve
I know we're never going back again
the songbird has lost its voice
You're leaving me a gold dust woman
I'm not getting any choice
Author notes
All of the song titles are in italics
Rock on Gold Dust Woman
Silver trophy in PiMrizr's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/582356
Written May 1st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Rumours by PiMrizr.
300 points, ended May 4, 2004, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats!!! Now someone needs to build you a second self... My thumb is still sore, maybe xDarknessFallsx can build it this time.
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i always admire those who can make a poem out of songs, that's so cool..and it takes a lot of creativity, great job!!! Oh and it fits together so well, perfect...thanks for sharing and good luck...
take care
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oooooo how fun! I really like the last stanza. Good job.....must've been hard! Good luck!!
peace and love
Susan
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great poem. i really like the rhyme scheme and how you worked all the songtitles in there. "that my love is the chain
wrapped around you like a noose" those lines are incredible. very vivid and powerful. nice work. -
killer
awsome really awsome keep them coming!!!!!!!! -
too good for this to be JUST on here you should do some serious thinking about getting this one published in a big city newspaper or sumthin' yes it's THAT good!!!!keep it up
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very well written. This must've been a hard poem to write, under the constraints of the contest. good job and good luck.
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This was kick ass, whisper! Of course, I don't know Fleetwood; but I recently did something like this for a contest- I used Whitesnake's song titles... (Acckkkk... lol.. remember our convo about those hair bands?? Heh..) great write!
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great job and so in touch with the song....
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This was excellently written. The imagery is wonderful. Good luck in the contest.
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This is such a sad poem. I must be honest, that I know hardly anything of Fleetwood Mac, much less song titles, but you have done a great job of using them all in your piece. great entry!
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Hi Whisper, you have done a very good job using those song titles in this poem! They fit very well in it and show us a perfect clear imagery!
Good luck in the contest!
Mari
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stunning hunny....simply stunning
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Mind, I do like those last two lines I think they're brilliant. Another good piece, can't seem to see what the song titles are though.
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Good poem
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This was awesome! I love Fleetwood Mac and I'm going to their concert June 8th so I'm kinda psyched! This was great entry!
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that was BEAUTIFUL- I am taken... great flow too... I'm really into flow... wow such a sad story expressed with such emotion... great poem!
Trin
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