by Gregg Rowe
When I gaze into your misty eyes
Chestnut green and star bright
Old memories of passionate past lovers
Linger between intertwining flesh
Inflaming reflections from mirrored bodies
Dancing, shadowed candles flicker
Never dying out
Like your smooth quivering skin when I
Trace every curve brushing lightly over
Your soft spot
Feeling the rhythm of your sigh
Candle flames are slowly melting white wax
Dancing, teasing, laughing
Shrinking in the pitch of the night
When I gaze into your eyes
Mist settles
Like hardened white wax
Chestnut green dancing
Author notes
On the surface, I am symbolizing my love for this girl that I was dating or a year until one night when I came home and she informed me that she had slept with my best friend from work. At the time we were dating, HIV/AIDS was just hitting the airwaves and making an impact in Canada. This is the same time I went for my test and was diagnosed wit HIV and by this time, we had already broken up as a couple. For the next year I would go to appointments with my ex-girlfriend while she was being tested for the virus and after a year was HIV free, where upon agreement we went our separate ways in life. This poem shows the calculations and risks we take when we do not know the sexual history of our partners and that love can be blind in the moment of passionate heat.
Written May 1st, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Eyes: The Mirror of the Soul by dark rainbow.
300 points, ended May 12, 2005, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - haven't seen yah in a while. ~relate~ by u took my user name.
450 points, ended December 9, 2006, 10 entries
Honorable mention
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What did you think
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for starters... beautiful image...
aaaaaawwwwww, very beautiful first line (yes, that's all i've read so far. lol... yes, i will start over to get the poem's full effect)
very vivid imagery of her eyes, and it does not have the excessive words tehre.. very nice
i would copy paste the whole poem as my favorite part... but i'll stick to these:
"Old memories of passionate past lovers
Linger between intertwining flesh"
so beautiful. very very nice. ilove the images.. and the one that follows.
the "Dancing, shadowed candles flicker" that never die out could symbolize the love that never ends between the two, no? Sorry.. i'm a literature freak, i interpret everything.
There is somthing lustful about this.. something sxeual, but done so well, that it's "clean" poetry
I really enjoyed reading this one.
Thank you so much for entering.
a pleasure to read
Best wishes,
AlbaSoul
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Great
Another wonderful piece and great mature civilized comment – Keep it up – Have you thought of writing a book I sure you have enough good pieces – Albert. -
An excellent poem which is well written... thank you for entering my contest and good luck!!!!
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Actually with that image in mind, and since this is blocked to kids, the hardening of the white wax is a symbolism of sperm, they are almost the same color when dry. (Hope that didn't gross you out
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Well..I like the solidifying of the mist ..into something that is just as ..hmm entrancing to some ..and almost masochistic..at least that's how it felt to me..maybe that the choices we choose to make, or not to acknowledge can be so damaging. I'm rambling.
Sorry.
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Beautiful, that's all I can say. From reading your comments I can tell how personal this is to you, but it's so great that you're able to write about it. Once again it is very beautiful. Hope you are alright.
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Very good poem. It's very descriptive and flows great. Thank you for entering my contest and the best of luck.
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A gorgeous poem and so wonderfully descriptive simply overflowing with metaphor! A terrific write!!! I think I have been defeated! Great write and best of wishes...~genielassie~
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I love how you discribe things, you know that. Every word romances the other and the flow is always flawless,
I love ya,
Caity
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Now that's just perfect
Much better.. and glad you sorted your bin out!! LOLOLOLOL
Ooohh smooth and sensual.. yessum.. me liked
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the imagery in the poem is so captivating i love it. 'chestnut green and star bright' i can see it the way it glimmers very well writen keep it up!!
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This was real, no dream here the perfection of what I was searching for at that time thanks for your comments on this
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nice write
kool picture 2
this was a very sweet poem, it seems almost like a poem about a dream 2 me... simply because it all sounds so perfect and i don't really believe in perfection ((im a little sinical)) but maybe this isnt a dream and you have found perfection, in which case you are very lucky..
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I enetered it in a contest and then deleted it form the contest and ended up in the garbage I'll go back and work on it I wondered what happened to it hehehe The contest said symbolism and metaphors but pertaining to objects I couldn't find an object in my poem except the one I was holding in my hand, so I had to deleted it
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at work
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why did you delete this??? it's a shame ....you did?? ahh well..
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