The moon lit the way to the shores that bore the stories of their future. They would soon pass into fiction, legend, never heard of again. Only leaving tiny traces of their existence that would be swept away over time. Through the sadness the white shores still called them home.
Author notes
Exactly 50 words yet again. Also, I don't think this story will be well understood if your not a Tolkien fan as it is about the elves leaving middle earth.
Written April 30th, 2004
A contest entry
- ~*~Fifty Word Fiction~*~ by Meridian.
350 points, ended May 7, 2004, 13 entries
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beautiful
beautiful poem. you portray an image of meaninglessness (hopefully that's what you intended). i say this because you stated, "They would soon pass into fiction, legend, never heard of again. Only leaving tiny traces of their existence that would be swept away over time." these people who think they're something are actually just something that will be forgotten, they will just be fiction and the few traces of them will be swept away in no time. it's a sad image (not sure if you intended for that). this is beautfil and you say a lot in a mere 50 words. -
*sniff* sailing into the west... That is the part of Tolkien's works, that no matter how many times I read, it always gets to me... I like this, very accurate and touching none the less.
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Very colourful and it talks of the passing of elves in such clear language. Good job.
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wow this is amazing and yet it is so short i love a good fantasy read that is my favorite subject unfourtunatly and do not have the talent to write about it great job~~~~~HopesAreLies/Alex~~~~~
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Very side-like view of the elven extinction, using various images in a little space. It works...a way with words makes a story writer...man..nice one.
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Da power house!!! This is so great. It's short, but your words make it brilliant. Damn, this was good. Live it, love it!!! So good!
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You're so damn good with words!! This is awesome! Good job! BB Morgaine
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chaCHING for the silmarillion, which i love. and for your piece, which i love! this is beautiful and deep and deserving of recognition in this contest. CONGRATS, i love it!! and yes, i am a tolkien fan (yay for the shameless) i much prefer this passing of the elves to that at the end of rings- and your title? well it draws the tolkien fans, dear. well done and good luck!!
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Brilliant!
Aw! This is so deep, what an awesome piece of writing. The standard of writing for this contest has truley awed me and this poem is testament to that standard. Well done and good luck. X
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