shes standing still, invisible
watching the world go by
shes standing still, watching
watching a boy she used to know
shes waiting for the right time
to reveal her tearstained features, swollen
in the rain no-one knows shes crying
she won't tell them whats upsetting her, she won't even try
she'll just watch as her whole world
passes her by
shes got a pretty face, beautiful
but she doesnt see how nice she really is
she can't stand to look in the mirror
shes afraid to see that person she hates
so shes doing everything to change
killing herself from the inside out
shes got a problem with food, counts every calorie
she doesn't seem to mind eating
but her meal soon comes back up
shes losing everything she ever used to be
shes wasting away but nobody see's
what a waste that beautiful young girls life has been
shes standing there, invisible
shes starting to feel faint
she hasn't digested in over a week
her body can't take the pain
shes lying in the hospital
wires coming out of her nose, arms, everywhere
that boy she used to know is crying
shes not invisible anymore
but its too late
shes starting to stop fighting
her weaknesses are starting to show
her heart just failed, all thats left is flesh and bone
shes killed herself from the inside out
but the fault wasn't her own
shes not invisible anymore
Author notes
Written April 30th, 2004
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A contest entry
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This was so true and fulll of raw emotion. It was totally moving.
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this is an AWSOME poem. its really moving and makes you think. i like that. it just showed what happens if you do those thins to yourself. good luck with the contest. oh and i am glad you didnt personally experience this and that you dont like it. not many people are like that these days. you are definately special(in a good way of course) and talented for sure.
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Beautiful
This was a very very moving piece. I loved it. It touched my heart in ways that most poems cannot. I have been on the verge of anorexia for than once and this poem really opened my eyes to the dangers that I already knew existed. Your choice of words was wonderful, your rhythm and flow was perfect. I'm glad o hear that it is not from personal experience. You have a true talent my dear. Great write, keep it up! Always, D* -
powerful piece right here totally capturing a big reason why people become anorexic...crying for attention...starving for love...nice write i truly enjoyed this...keep up the good work
much love and respect
karabeth -
dieing inside i konw all about.. hard on the soul.. great write
~VanGuard -
Nice, Sad *Sniff*
Woah Hunnni.. This again is really powerful. your such a great writer, every piece has so much passion into it.. lol. I loved reading this and id read it again and again cuz its so beautiful and meaningful and sometimes not to all the parts but to some alot of people can relate. Great write. keep on. Lots of Love Beki xXx -
Moving
This is a really powerful poem, and it almost made me cry because I have a friend who's had an eating disorder. Writing this really shows that you care in a sort of intricate manner. This is really moving. Keep up the good work, Annandhel. -
flawless
im not really sure what to say to express how extraordinary this poem is, you have a way with words and i cant wait to read more.
shes starting to stop fighting
her weaknesses are starting to show
her heart just failed, all thats left is flesh and bone
shes killed herself from the inside out
but the fault wasn't her own...
shes not invisible anymore....
amazing stanza though i loved the entire poem, that has to be my favorite. i thank you for writing and posting this read. i also want to thank you for your comment on my poem, bloodshedding whore, im very glad that you enjoyed the read, and again i thank you. ~Julzzz~ -
very good
i really liked this poem, especially since i could relate to the eating disorder part. "killing herself from the inside out"
<you said that very well. it's basically what's going on inside. keep up the good work -
o.o' Wow...This just made me like, "..This...I can't place my finger on it" I can relate to it some how, I don't know how though...*sigh* Ohwell. Anyhoo, keep up the great work.
-Lillith -
Sad.... ive been there. but ive gotten help. this is very sad. great write!
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sad and powerful, and a stark reminder of the dangers of eating disorders, thanks for sharing -
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no im not doing this, and its not from a personal experience.. its just somethin that seems to be happenin more and more these days and it really upsets me..
thanx for the comment
love
Charlotte
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innocence lost~
HEy! I thought that this was a really good poem. It was nicely written and had a good flow. Please tell me that you are not doing this. That is quite sad. I agree with the others it does make you think. It kind of makes me wonder who in the world is doing this, just wish I could help show them that they aren't invisible. Keep writing and thank you for sharing.
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Wow... What a strong concept. A different look at eatting disorders. Being a dancer, I see them often. And you portayed the pain, the feelings and emotions these girls go through. It's never their weight that's the issuse, it's wanting to be seen, in a strange way. This was hauntingly beautiful. Good job.
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brillant my friend brillant you have such a way with words and it doesn make you hink well a lot of thinking hmm let me think lots of thinking well anyway... AWSOME poem!
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I can only hope this is a fictional piece.
I agree with Broken-Spirit It does really make you think.
It is so sad. But in my head I can see how this can happen to so many people. I never knew anyone exactly like that but in other ways I can relate it to myself - so many years ago - and others I used to know.
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thats brillant
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interesting concept. I haven't thought of it like that before. Rhythm is great.
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