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Personal Perfection

Perfection...
Unable to be attained
by it's true definition

To me perfection is...

A great movie
in the dark
cuddled on the couch

Ice cream coated faces
in the summer
at the park

Korn blasting
through my speakers
as I set about my chores

A smile so big
it lights up my heart
and brightens my day

So many little moments
I steal from time to time

Perfection to me
is me, Eric and Jeremy
for eternity

Author notes

Honorable mention in StayWithMe032's contest
Written April 29th, 2004

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  • Dragonshadowed
    May 2, 2004
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    Wow, this is really sweet. Everyone has their own definition of perfection, and most times, it is something that cannot be obtained. I must say that I like your idea of perfection a lot better. Great observation here.

    Joshua


  • Chaos777
    May 1, 2004
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    ahhh perfection. i agree with you, there is hidden meaning here, not to hidden but not blatant. perfection is in the eye of the beholder much like beauty. if you feel you are the perfect you then you are. if you think you lack then you will lack. maybe i am misinterperting this.

    ~Steve the DarkSchizo


  • Touchof1der silver member
    April 30, 2004
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    I like the way you used all the little things that bring such great joy and pleasure and put them into such charming write.

  • StayWithMe
    April 30, 2004
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    awww... this is so sweet and all the little things in life truly are perfection. this has a nice flow and is just great! thank you for entering my contest!


  • Talia
    April 30, 2004
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    I'm nerfect what ya bloody on about. I have to be nerfect, cos I'm a bloody pobody. A lovely write, quite a change from the other two I have just read mind. Keep up the good work

    Natalia


  • Cemetery Rose
    April 30, 2004
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    Awe that was sweeeeeet lovely job and good luck I loved the author's comment....it took me a moment but its been a long week and its 3:05 in the am.
    PEace and love
    susan


  • candy177
    April 29, 2004
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    Oh that's just too sweet! Although you should look in your author's comments...unless you MEANT to spell nobody wrong! Good luck in this contest! (Not like you need it - this is a winner!)


  • My Darkness
    April 29, 2004
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    i'm glad to see you are so happy...
    great write, thanks for sharing and good luck...

    take care

    -Stac-

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