You WILL remember me; I promise you that,
when you look at the wreckage of your life.
I'm not going to kill you; that would be too easy,
I'm going to teach you the meaning of strife
When I am through with you, no one will speak your name.
You'll be talking to your shadow for a friend.
You'll be dwelling in the shadows, and hiding from the light,
and begging for your time to reach it's end.
When all is said and done, you will envy the lepers
who have, at least, the compassion of the church.
while you will see nothing but the backs turned on you
and your family will leave you in the lurch.
You will learn to fear the mirror, as it reflects your shame,
and pray no one will recognize your face.
you will long for a companion, at the same time shun the same,
and, even all alone, feel out of place.
And as you rot in loneliness, imprisoned in your soul
and praying for the warmth of death's embrace
you WILL think about the things you did to me;
when you close your eyes, you will see my face
Author notes
so long and good night
Written April 29th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Your The Killer, make me scared by BleakXEternity.
300 points, ended August 26, 2005, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sweet Revenge by cookie crumbs.
300 points, ended December 14, 2006, 26 entries
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hmm...revenge! ahh three cheers for sweet revenge..lol. nicely done, nicely done! good visuals in this! i liked it.
<3shelby -
Karma: what goes around comes around.
thanks for entering!
babybug121 -
wow, great work! it had an excellent rhyme scheme and really came to life. i love the way you wrote it! thanks for entering me contest and good luck.
dark dreams of blood,
Bleezie -
excellent
Excellent and well-written poem. It is strongly stated as is warranted by the force of your betrayal.
I was a great read!
Good luck in the contest!
Regards to you,
Serenem -
Woah, remind me never to piss you off. I love this revenge poem. It makes you feel all warm inside to think about the one who has hurt you getting what they deserve. I really liked this. It was a great write!!
Much Loves
KLA
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WOW...simply amazing write.The rhyme and meter were great but the words...so powerful.I can definately feel the heat in this.Great write dear friend.Best of luck and blessed be.Thanks for entering
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na
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What did this poem teach me?
Karma is a bitch! And if one feels that they must bring pain to another, they'd better dig a second grave and call in advance for a hospital room, because they'll need it more than they person they have targeted! Why does this poem scream "evil laughter"? Because it reminds me of all the movie and television serial killers and some of their final words. But the person in this piece who deserves what's coming should've thought about what they were doing long before they allowed it to happen. I know so many who deserve what they now receive.
I think this is the best I've read yet of the "revenge" poems. Even I, the perpetual forgiver, have a "don't push me or you'll regret it" side.
Many blessings,
Raven Aurora
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Super
SUPER revenge is always sweet especially when they don't die right away? -
Oh, absolutely necessary!
...I swear and call 'em every name I can think of (in private, or sympathetic audience). Then, I smugly give 'em over to their chosen course with, "May the Lord repay you according to your works." (to quote St Paul)
Sometimes I have even witnessed boomerang karma...amazing!
Love,
~ G
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This is true
but it does feel good to rant sometimes, even if you don't actually do anything mean
think of it as a safety valve
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Yes, Tahuti,I figured it was something like that ...I was just trying to ensure no one else would think it was something to emulate.
~ G
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P.S. Actually, the best 'revenge' is success...drives your enemy crazy. Or, just be nice to them...
"If your enemy is hungry, give him bread to eat;
And if he is thirsty, give him water to drink;
For so you will heap coals of fire on his head,
And the LORD will reward you." ~ Proverbs 25:21-22
~ G
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well, to be honest, this is just a rant. It's just me letting off some steam. I just had a meeting with the social-security judge from hell, so I needed to vent a little.
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Good poem...bad idea!
Who would want to chain themselves to that kind of karma?
What you wish on another you will face yourself. Let go, and they will bear their own burden and consequences for their actions, at their appointed time. Simple, but true Justice.
Love & Light,
~ Ma'atkara
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lol Sounds like you had fun with this, the first stanza sounds pretty forced though. Otherwise, I liked it alot.
-Jake -
yeah I know but I was thinking of it in a sexy dominat way you know me, my mind is in the gutter, always think of sex and you know i know it was not for me but damn I had fun with it
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Oh Naughty, Naughty, Naughty..THIS is NOT meant for YOU, hon.You never did anything to deserve this. I have someone else in mind.. and they deserve it.
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bows her head down and says I am up for the challenge do with me as you please if you think you can break this girl, but please leave a shell of me, so i can rebuild my self and come back witha vengence and put your ass in it's place for once and for all my love!
Edited on Apr 29, 2:30 p.m. because ''. -
that remineds me of this person that i once know.. i left her life a mess.. but she started it.. she made me mad....
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