The road to Shangra-La is short…
A drug, a love-
A dance, a sport!
Until,
(Of course)
The straying
And playing
Is weighing, and where are you?
Where are you?
Many roads lead Away, it seems-
And a thousand dreams
Are based on arrival.
Is life merely survival
Until you arrive?
Paths are etched around the world
Some short,
Some longer, when unfurled...
But the longest road
(The longest road)
Leads
Home.
Author notes
I've always loved LongRoadHome's screen name, and we get into pun wars and generally harrass each other a bunch. Sooo, when I wrote a limerick teasing his cartoon haikus, he wrote a return limerick about my slippers.
So, I thought, "heh HEH! I'll write something actually POETIC about his screen name. Let's see his response to THAT!" So, this is the result. I worked in his name, though the poem itself isn't about him. He doesn't seem the straying and playing type. He's more like the cunning and punning type.
I think that's really bad enough. 
Anyone who hasn't read his work should have a look!
Written April 29th, 2004
A contest entry
- All walks of life by SilverWolf.
335 points, ended July 9, 2008, 41 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is great. I love the question you put into everyones head. There is a good beat to this poem. Great job, and good luck in the contest i am very glad that you shared this with me.
"Writing is a therapy all it's own. Stay strong, keep writing." -
oh wow- that adds a twist I never even thought of. you've got a good eye!
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GlassSlippers,
You are going to think that I am crazy, but when I first read it I thought it was of a spiritual nature. I saw the first stanza as immorality or something portraying the world's state today, the second as the second coming, and the third meeting our maker. ??? I guess I am way of base.
Good write.
Anulka
Edited on May 10, 7:54 p.m. because ''. -
i could have sworn i wrote a comment on this? huh... well one way or the other theis a teriffic poem. thanks.
fallen. -
Impressive.
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" the longest road leads home" what a great ending to a neat little piece...I ;ole this very much...freda
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This is beautifully succinct, and it has a lyrical quality with the repetition. Normally repetition bugs me but you did it beautifully. Awesome write.
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good write
i do like this and its subject. altho im not too fond of the ( ) in it, the poem flowed nicely. may i inquire as to "Shangra-La"? the road to anywhere can be short, but the benefits may not be as good. -
I don't know the poet you are referring to, but I think you did a splendid job with his name - very creative. I've found the poem to have depth and wisdom weaved from beginning to end. This is indeed something "poetic"!
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this is a great write, and like segerfan says i was shocked too that it was about someones screen name, but hey ho it was inspired and am off now searching for my shangri la......
lisa xx -
This was a great poem I was shocked to find out that the end its about someones screenname and not just another deep thought of a poor wandering soul lol Great write!
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oh, LongRoad's a good friend of mine. We tease back and forth. It wasn't so much niceness as "I'll beat you" that made me write this, so I don't deserve any praise for selflessness, LOL!
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applaud
Your intentions are well, it gladdens my heart to see you've done such a wonderful and great captured piece in his name. Do onto others as you would do onto yourself, you've provoked that thought with this piece. Also giving me the thought process of if you learn to welcome something ill thought or evil, those things will seek you out... meh, I don't know if that makes any sense anyway. Thanks for sharing, it's a good lesson in itself. Take care of yourself and keep on thinking kindly of ours. Always ~Star -
I think you did an excellent job on this. It is very sweet. I must read this lymerick that started it Great job, thank you so much for sharing this.
take care
~whisper
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heh i like it, its almost commical and definately musical and with a message to boot. verry nice work.
fallen. -
i love this. it doesnt have a set perfect rhyme scheme... it's out of the ordinary. it flows great. great write, very nice work... keep it up!
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Great beginning, it opens the poem up really well. The format is really unique, and the poem flows well. Great write.
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Excellent
Amen I am still trying to get home but home is no longer there since my grandmother, dad and mother have died.
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Wonderful
Oh, I loved this! (I think I am going to quite enjoy going through your poems! Thank you SO MUCH for all the LOVELY comments you made--they really blessed me!) The choice of words is excellent--"A drug, a love- A dance, a sport!" ...and then where are you? You described perfectly the emptiness that comes with pursuing the world's distractions. And yet, I think the difficulty is not that the road home is long, but the decision to turn around is hard... and humbling. But once you make it, He is immediately present, isn't He? Because our God runs to us. Thank God for that.
In Christ,
Rita
(Now on to the next!)
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a great write, beautiful in its own way, y
I relate to this... I have been trying to get home for a long time and it seems like I may never get there -
very good
This was a great read to start my day. It is so easy to find your escape (Shangra-La), we all do it. Then, as you say, the hard part is returning home.
A very good read.
thanks,
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Nice job GS
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What would you change? I'm open to advice.
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Nice. It's pretty good. Some parts i didn't quite get until after reading it again a few more times but that's ok. Overall it's good. Good Job
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