This yearly traditional phone call,
as I listen to your Scottish,
frail voice relate the gossip,
when it's time to hang up
I'll swallow the lump
in my throat, shed
tears, whisper:
I love
you
by Gregg Rowe
This yearly traditional phone call,
as I listen to your Scottish,
frail voice relate the gossip,
when it's time to hang up
I'll swallow the lump
in my throat, shed
tears, whisper:
I love
you
This yearly traditional phone call,
as I listen to your Scottish,
frail voice relate the gossip,
when it's time to hang up
I'll swallow the lump
in my throat, shed
tears, whisper:
I love
you
Author notes
Written April 29th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- saying good-bye by forgotten dream.
350 points, ended August 5, 2004, 51 entries
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this is such a beautiful sweet piece. it is touching, and is something most can relate too - traditional calls to our mothers who aren't always close enough to be with. The form worked so well too. amazing piece, thank you for entering and good luck <33
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This is so tender. Beautifully written. Best of luck in the contest to you.
take care
~whisper
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This is a beautiful Nonet. It reminds me of my personal calls to my mama. Though they aren't just yearly...they are weekly at least. I hate the miles that separate us, for time passes too quickly as it is.
Thank you for sharing your feelings, and for entering the contest.
Sam
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This was quite beautiful and touching. The love of a mother is unmatched by anything in the world. I am very fortunate to have been blessed with the one that I have, just as I am sure that you feel the same way.
I do know the feeling of the lump in the throat hanging up the phone, but I must say that I am lucky that my Mom only lives one city away and I was visit almost any time I want. Nicely done, and best of luck in the contest!
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Good poem
That is a really sweet poem. It feels so real...like not made up just to ryme or anything, just more like it's happening right now. Great job. -
I can't lengthen it then it would be a completely different poem and the form I have chosen is a NONET: nine syllables in the first line and following each line after you drop a syllalbe until you get to one, so words, ideas, images, metaphors, and similes have to be tight for a poem of this nature
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Ill say its sad and touching, but it could use some length, but great write either way
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This is so beautiful and touching, honored to have come across such a heartwarming write. It's concise and considerate...
as I listen to your Scottish,
frail voice relate the gossip,
when it's time to hang up
I'll swallow the lump
Nice format as well...I need to go hug my mother now ;-) -
A winner
this is truly touching.I myself am far away from my mom for the second time in my 32 years.I have always been close and I feel the closeness you have with your mom in these words.Congrats and best luck on this contest.Even if you do not win this is indeed a winner. -
Moving
Poignant is my favorite word today, and it fits this. How sad that yearly traditional call is, not for Christmas, or birthdays, or good news, only Mothers' Day. And then so little of substance, only gossip, and not a message of love, but a whisper. You have pushed all my emotional buttons! Great nonet. -
Gregg, this is so sad...
I have to say...my mother is in Europe on a much deserved vacation...and it will be the first Mother's Day ever that she will not be around for me to lavish all kinds of goodies on (she is my buddy!
)...and it makes me sad. So, i cannot even imagine how this feels. Touched me.
UB
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beautifully written. simple and elegant. love the concrete form of petering out. as if words were too weak to express th emotions felt. and at the same time representative of the way telephone calls seem to end when one has nothing, or too much, to say. like the placing of traditional with the Scottish. gives a very clear picture of the mother. and of course the traditional practice of making these calls that start of more as an annual ritual but reveal our inner feelings in a seemingly habitual communication.
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This is a wonderful write, and the nonet, well it is one of my favourite forms, this form can be used for anything, and if perfectly worded it just flows beautifully, Great write my friend, I love the emotion that eminates from this.........
take care
sanity.
Edited on Apr 29, 3:50 because 'blasted sticky keys....hehehe'. -
A wonderful write - Unfortunately my mother passed away some time ago, and I sadly miss any sort of communication - Try to make the most of any call . . as one day you will be talking to yourself with so many things still unsaid - Albert.
Edited on Apr 29, 3:25 because 'typo'. -
How beautifully sad...great job this oozes emotion and makes me think of my own relationship with my mother
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