Pounded thin through splitting blue light
Shafts dance around me, playing to crystal.
Electrolytes and long inescapable pauses
Directing me from float to swell, then horizon.
Layer upon layer of frozen idea and tissue
If I were to bend quickly, all would shatter.
Another frozen dreamer in another false flash
Like young love, I'm a crawling glacier.
Floe to floe, following the North star home
To a place where the sun doesn't matter.
Author notes
Written April 28th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- AllWrite Magazine Poetry Contest for Adults (20 and over) April, Prewrites Allowed by Runawaytrain.
300 points, ended April 3, 2005, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Thank you Wanda.
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A wonderful poem, horus8...& the comments are 'priceless'...hehehe 
Good luck in the contest...not that you need any...you have Talent... Wanda
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Incredible
This is incredibly sublime writing in that it conveys a message to the reader in poetic verse. You did well. -
This is so sad and since the idea of the contest is clear it fits perfect. I won't wish you good luck. The write is sure to place.. Take Care, Catressa
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i like that. it is a real good poem. keep it up.
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You used Wolf's Rain!!! I loved your poem!
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What a charming thing to imply.
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I don't know why I always feel as if each one you post is the best, maybe because you progress a bit each moment of each day. As you know, I admire your talent immensely and this is no exception.
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Thanks, you're a doll.
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This is a feeling that before I read this, I would have thought was impossible to convey with words! What marvelous metaphor, symbol and simile you have crafted together.
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Very beautiful write. I like how you've given us a different picture of ice and cold. My favorite line is
Layer upon layer of frozen idea and tissue
Hmmm.. makes you think, definitely!
Good write, and thanks for sharing.
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This gave me chills. I'm very fond of reading this. Great job.
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Priceless, be a prick, and all should be well.
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That is wonderful writing- just wonderful. You could have combined this with your last poem and called it "Cold Cunts" which reminds me I have to go off to another job interview.
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it's good to know it improves something
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Brrr! I'm chilled to the bone by this write that permeates the body like a cold draft, in an lonely house, on an icy night in northern Alaska. But warmed, too, by the warmth of poet on fire! Great northern lights! What a poem!
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(Aw, phooey, the line thru the words special effect didn't work. Well, I tried.)
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-Interesting-
-Thanks for sharing-
-It doesn't suck-
(Sorry. I'm trying to be funny again.
I'd better stop before I hurt myself.)
Pretty and haunting. All ice-crystally. Like it's beautiful and you want to touch it, but it's razor-sharp and super-pointy. And clear and true, but refracty if you tilt your head just slightly. OK, I'll go away now. -
Excellent
You are one of the best poets here! Great write, thanks for sharing and keep them great writes coming. -
hmm, this is rather interesting, and rather good as well. Great job horus
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Well it's cold here in Manchester but hey, we have an interesting Gay Village
but where I am going with this.. who know's.. I am wandering around in my jammies..saying "is it thursday??" hehhehe damned night shifts..
I really liked this one nephew.. it has a deep soul to it.. I like this phase you're going through at the moment..
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some really choice words combining to freeze images in this one. Young love under exploding glacier??? madness.
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I like this crest of wave you are riding on .. this is quite beautiful even though it is cold and you know how I feel about about cold ..you are lovely. good morning.
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Yeah, I've been sucking more cock lately.
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I think what I meant was the further north you go the longer the days until it's always daylight, you didn't know that it was never dark at the poles until opposites?
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what's with you lately?
i've noticed a string of simple, elegant, tasteful, and almost fragile poetry from you lately. even when you spew out angry words.
hope things are good.
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Not like your other writes, more pensive this one. Philosophical in the sense that does the blackness of night actually meet the lightness of day or is it a progression of blendness. Another insightful piece from you Horas.
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Fantastic write! Cold is such a beautiful delicate thing and your poem captures the overwhelming sensation!
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how can the sun ever find the night when they are oppisite of each other huh I mean maybe early in the morning the sun is out and the moon still gravitates in the sky, huh my pot pie is getting cold, intresting read as always!
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Hmm, this was very good, i enjoyed reading it, thank you so much for sharing, keep up the good work, lookin forward to more
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Hmm, interesting... I like it! I like the way you took this into perspective! You did a good job! Keep up the good work! God bless,
sloshydan
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