See the Milky Way’s ascent
from God’s index finger print;
that same hand which carved my eyes-
tiny windows to the skies.
Dew from sculpted velvet rose-
some of which has formed my nose,
while in garden’s labyrinth
fused His breath of hyacinth.
Glory spirals He placed where
glow-aurora dons my hair,
juice of coconuts will yield
sweetness of His kisses sealed.
Oceans -salted tears He shed
for men’s flaws His Son had bled;
earthly gifts that mask the sins-
seeding souls as life begins.
Once within this vacant heart
is His voice that sets apart
wonders that He’s made for me-
so that full of Him I’ll be.
When come doubts that draw the fear
should we question God is near,
Look around and touch your lips
fashioned from His fingertips~
Close as skin and intimate
is His love and marveled wit-
woven in the womb are we,
Passionate Propinquity!
Author notes
' You have hedged me behind and before,
And laid Your hand upon me.' Psalm 139:5
Written April 14th, 2002
In a list
A contest entry
- Philosophical / Religious Rhyming Poem by Ellis.
1000 points, ended February 19, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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excellent
excellent and awe inspiring.you are truly a gifted
poet
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Thank you so much!
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Excellent
You have truely honored God with this write, To think our being was so amazingly done, This brings a smile to my heart and lips thank you for inspiring me. Well done poet -
Deep!
Glory spirals He placed where
glow-aurora dons my hair
Wow auntie that was amazing....you've done incredible...
I don't know why I am reading all of these lol
Kari -
From the quill of a master.. (mistress..?..nah.) - Your talent is unmistakeable. The images are clear and bountiful.. A pleasure to ponder.
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Thank you
Thank you for your submission. Judging starts Monday. --Ellis -
I'd nearly forgotten ....one of the most spirit-centered poems I've had the pleasure to scribe for the Lord. Thank you...I needed you to bless it tonight.
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you can't change perfection
I was destined to read this glorious poem! God worked his wonders again. You see, I needed a reminder of where I was when the Lord first interevened on my behalf. Thank you Cookie. I know I wrote a poem about it...I need to find it. When I do, I would like to share it with you... God Bless Us All -
Wow this is such a great poem. Keep up the great work and keep on writing. Check out some of my poems. You are a great poet. All of the poems I read inspire me to write more so please continue to write poem. Thanks a bunch and please comment on my poems. I haven't had many comments or even any on some of my poems and I like getting comments on my poems.
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... this part
"Oceans -salted tears He shed
for men’s flaws His Son had bled;
earthly gifts that mask the sins-
seeding souls as life begins. "
i must have sat here and read this stanza twenty times.
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~ Wendy -
exhilirating
this poem is what i like to call "next level" like myself i can tell your outside of the box through your word choice and order.......i'm glad to see there's another intelligent life form on this planet -
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Cookie this is beautiful........flows so lovely. A creative write dear hugs and love,Sherry -
Dear stephanie...is there ANYONE in the world LIKE you??? And your comments, so carefully and distinctly said? You make me laugh, bite my lip AND cry. Why?? Because your heart is right with this stuff...(for lack of a better word). Let's keep building each other up...wanna?? Heheh. This one is for another venue of the spiritual context, in which case would ON PURPOSE make it for a certain market. I try to do what I know best, but like stretching just the same. Thank you!!!
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excellent
again, i'm muchly impressed with your strict adherence to the 7-7-7-7 format. lyrical in a way, i think. hypnotic? rhyme and meter, when properly used, seem to sink in and linger and ferment and it's so subtly done that you (as the reader) can't quite place your finger on WHY that specific poem 'got in' the way it did.
egads! what a run-on sentence!
Edited by stephanie sunshine on right now because 'subtley? or subtly? urgh.'. -
excellent
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don't touch it!
He will come in the night
when ythere is no light,
You'll feel His touch
and in His grace delight,
He'll change your world
and make it bright,
He'll be with you
every night. -
don't touch it!
I wouldn't change a thing...The flow is smooth, the images wonderful! Amazing..Now I know I will have to come back and read some more! :) -
don't touch it!
Behold the heart of poetry,
Does echo in eternity.
The very breath of life and death,
Needing but an eye to see.........Just EXELLANT reflecting the wonder of his love and the majesty of his being. -
excellent
peacefully beautiful -
excellent
absolutely beautiful piece!! Your wording is awe inspiring!! Absolutely fabulous!! -
encouraging
Beautifully penned. I am always amazed at how good you are. Don't know why, I should expect it. Wonderful images here. jdr -
it IS beautifully constructed. fantastic format and you didn't break from that (something i find very difficult to do)
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what can I say....beautiful
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wow, this poem was so beautiful...simply wonderful.
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