~INHALING~........Slow and painful as memories rush in like rivers.....first kiss....anniversaries...babies born......~EXHALING~....sharp and agonizing.....memories fleeting.....holidays so happy....sweet kisses....loves gained and lost....could've....should've....would've...heaven or hell?....~GASPING~.....last breaths taken.
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Death is something that comes to us all.What will be on your mind when that time comes?
Written April 28th, 2004
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This write so many emotions all rush together. I remember watching my mothers face as she was looking far off into her own world when she was told she was going to die. This is exactly how I felt she was feeling at the time.
Great write. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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MarquisB....thank you so much for the many encouraging words.Your contest has truly inspired me.I do hope that there are more like it soon.It is so hard to convey deep emotion in 50 words or less....I struggled....but eventually came up with a few.I am glad that i met your requirements for the contest.Someone dear to me also added to your competetiveness and told me to make them all 50 words EXACT.That was a lil harder.He is a seasoned writer and I am merely a doodler.LOL.I am proud i was able to make you...and him...happy.Thank you again, it is most appreciated.
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Awesome!
Oh my god! One word 'Remarkable'! This is awesome, what an excellent approach to this contest. It's original, it's effective and above all it works - BIG time. I love this, it really is one amazing write. I applaud your talent Serenity, it's truely remarkable. X
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wow. I think you did a great job with this. very thought provoking. good luck to you in the contest.
Lea
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