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automatic shutdown

it's an automatic shutdown whenever you're around me
because i always seem to just stare at you dreamily
always seem to start to slouch
always going as quiet as a baby lamb
always muttering as if i can't speak
it's an automatic shutdown
compared to the usual way i am
usually I'm outgoing
loud and proud
weird and totally crazy
why oh why does this happen to me
and it's all because of you
it's amazing how a girl like me so brave so out there
can be quieted by just one simple normal boy like you

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had to stop early so i'll finish later
Written April 27th, 2004

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  • artis
    May 24, 2004
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    love stills the tongue and hastens the heart into a hammer of industrious beats, the bellows of the lungs work overtime expelling the breathlessness caused by his/her arrival and departure, speech is without substance and words are left hanging unspoken in minds blinded by what could be...good poem...poems...enjoyed the depth of such a young mind...Artis

  • Poems
    May 1, 2004
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    beauty is in the eye of the beholder

    this poem is about how whenever this one boy is around me i almost always seem to shutdown somehow.
    also sorry about all the always. just the way i am.


  • April 28, 2004
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    um... I think that there was too many 'always' in there, you said always 3 times well, what exactly is this about? Is it about.....erm.... I am not sure, could you tell me?