A blind
bleeding heart fool
stumbles errantly
between dismal failures,
misinterpreted yet comical emotional connections,
and a dull, hollow shell:
a sad invention of a cynical mind.
He emerges again
after hastily applying colorful band-aids to festering wounds.
Seeking only a cause,
he walks softly
chasing hushed whispers
through the barren empty wasteland
of his own lonely existence.
Author notes
Dismiss this as rambling, if you so choose.
Written April 27th, 2004
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Those colorful band aids. Excellent choice of words there. I am understanding that to be like a smile over a bad day. Nice work and good luck in the contest!
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This does explore quite a bit with a few words...cover ups, cynicism, and a nothingness that is quite pervasive - the reader feels it. Best of luck with your entry.
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Powerful and very expressive are words to describe this poem. You succeeded in painting in words the pain of a life...the questions that stay unanswered and the loneliness in seeking for a cause. Yes, we all can relate to the "colourful band-aids"...fooling ourselves.... Great poem and good luck in the contest!
Nicolette
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Great poem. I think that almost everyone is a fool at one point or another in their lives. People lie, causing you to believe what you want to be real, but in the end when it turns out to be nothing but a disappointment, your heart bleeds, or in that sense, bleeding as in you are drained of all hope that this person would be better then the last.
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sad,gripping
wow,this is a super kool poem,i like the part where you say: applies colorful bandaids to festering wounds,that is so creative!! this poem is sad,in that i feel anyone alone doesn't deserve such solitude!! sometimes in this world,all you need is a good friend to be truly happy!! i just like this poem,it's well written!! way to be,hugs poetic janis -
Great poem!!!
I think it's true that having that cause for your life is what makes the difference between a fool and a person of greatness. And, without that one true thing, often what we end up chasing after and embracing are nothing more than the whispers you mention. They seem like something when we start to pursue them, but they are only whisps and empty promises, and leave us still in need. -
how sad this piece is. I dont think its the same longing as mine here. But this longing seems aboutjust as tough.
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Lol, this was grimly pleasant.
Reminds me of every day life, getting up.. struggling, then doing it all over again.. but in a dark morbid way..
It is very poetic, and wrote just how it should be read.. it was also very easy on the eyes and easy to read. Thankyou. -
This is one of the coolest poems i ve ever read! keep up the good work! Awsome! Again id applaud but im out! i will come back though! this is just too good!
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I like it's simplicity. Just enough said to give it oomph and not overspoken. Great impact left on the reader. Great job.
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Wow, you carry some kind of heavy burden my friend. This is very expressive and insightful. You have a fabulous way of connected a certain feeling with articule and artful wording.
Great write.
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this is amazing. i loved the way in which you have structured this and also the wording you have used. it was great. the depth was also excellent. my compliments. keep up the excellent writing. you have a great style!
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this was so deep, i loved the intensity of it.
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very deep and all of us can connect on some level, thanks for entering and good luck.
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o.O ... I like it I like how u interprit a fool . And the part bout the bandaids kinda made me laugh. But I will agree with SOG it did go a little fast and had to read over some portion. but it was a good right none the less, great job.!!!
Kla -
I like the idea, and I don't think you are rambling, maybe if you put it into clauses they'd agree, I think it's great though, Fools are us all
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It's not so much rambling, as too faced-paced (at least in my opinion). It's a good write, but I found myself having to go back and read portions of it again, because they went by too fast. That may be a product of the shortness of the lines, I don't know. It's just something to think about. It was good when I got through it, though.
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Who said you could write my biography? And get it so right too!
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very good poem, person who is gullible and easy to take advantage of because he or him might be in love, is sad to be lonely but it worst if people hurt you, there is a saying is better to be alone that to be with people that hurt you, but for me does not work, I love to be sorrounded by people, I take the challenge to be hurt, lovely poem
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I agree too, And I love how you write in such short stanzas it just gives it all the more feeling. Anyways, take care and keep up the good work!
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Kepp it up
Yes, I agree with Steppenwolfe. Fabulous work and very, in its own style. It is very intense and well done. Very good and keep it up, please! -
You know, when I saw this.. I thought it said Food without a cause.. I was like.. Okay? Odd. Then a fresh look at the title and I see, "AH! Fool without a cause." Do fools ever have causes? I think they only seek to blindly destroy and corrupt. I think you did very well on this. And it is a bit rambling, but it strangely has it's own sense of organization. I say you did very good. Nice work. (No return comment please)
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