Invoking the world to see a new light
My inspiration of hope in sight
A predictable motion so bright
It can compose the darkest life
The orange sphere takes it's flight
After the seraneading moonlit night
These colors like symphonies in delight
Watching this stars twilight
It's soothing warmth feels so right
This marvelous show of sunlight
Is just a simple,daily sunrise
Author notes
Um well I know this sucks but I was really bored and I tried to write it in less than 5 min. and I did.So yeah,i donno know.
Written April 26th, 2004
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this is good. It doesn't suck. Keep up the good work!!!
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very good job here! I like it especially the rhyming... it makes it flow well.. pretty good for writing it in less then five minutes and no it doesnt suck! Keep up the good work
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Thank you.
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Wow. You can ryme! You go girl! I ryme worth shit. i cannot rune at all. i try but i couldn't ever ryme like that. my brain would shut down on me from over work if i tried to do something like that.
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hun that was so good! damn you your so good. but anyway you did really well with rhyming! and orange writing? you and your orange. oh i liked how you like gave us a image of the sun rise too.
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I liked this poem a lot.Very nice imagery and the backround with the theme is very nice.
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hey grl!! its really good. i like the part when you say . . .
The orange sphere takes it's flight
After the seraneading moonlit night
These colors like symphonies in delight
well, ima tlk to yaz l8ter. bye bye grl. wuv yaz.
Cierra JD -
Verry nice write, it gives me a good mental picture, i like how it rymes, good write, and the dark backgrount contradicts the poem, nice touch, TTYL!
- Jaguar ;~)
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This doesn't suck at ALL. It's a beautiful piece of writing. I was surprised because when I read the title I didn't expect such a dark looking page, interesting conflict. This flowed really well and was a clear picture. Great write.
~Beth
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