Through the crevice of dawn, the sun peeks behind mist,
And susurrates, in teasing tones,
How she wakes in another's arms,
And laughs in the face of my meaningless tears.
Not for the grief of stronger wills
This torment aspires,
Rekindle tired fires
And invoke harsh screaming as your anthem.
Live in the world that denies you,
That guffaws at pathetic pain,
Its pleasure a stain
Upon an ancient, aching soul,
Trapped in igneous stone,
It stumbles through half-existence
And awakens lesser demons.
But were it not for dumb hope,
For the pride and stubborn denial,
Every sentence a trial,
And every pasted smile is a ton of pressure in a sore mandible.
Oh, were it not for hot defiance
Against merciless fate,
Against cold and cruel hate,
I would never breathe fresh air.
The moments that echo in a fevered brain,
Are only the well-oiled start
To sweet torture,
The high-pitched melodies that careen,
That feed the darkest fears
And summon blood from deaf ears,
These are the songs that bounce in twilit chambers,
The hymns of praise to a netherworld complete
With her image.
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Written April 26th, 2004
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Whoa, waht an ache life has given you. I feel it. BEen there too. Being human is pain, anyway. Very nice flowing write, btw. I liked it. Feelings expressed with power.
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Excellent.
i just thought i'd pick a random poet to write a random comment on a random poem. I've seen the your name around and i know you have quite a few fans...i now see why. This poem is anything but random and the words obviously well chosen.
I chose to read this poem has the women in my life have been less than exceptional. and i have been hurt in my own experiences. You're an intelligent writer w/the heart of a gentleman. Awesome write and well appreciated by a fellow man who's heart is lost on those who know not what they want in life.
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This made my heart swim up to my head, so to speak. it was really good i thought, really really inviting and just so ...magificent
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I agree with the other comments made so far. This is truly a great write. I just fell into your words and swam around in them until I started cramping. lol. The imagery was fantastic with words like twilit chamber and netherworlds. Just don't see that kind of wording that often.
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This is really good. The imagagery bought the whole poem together and made it really alive. The wording was really well chosen. This is an excellent write.
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Wow! The immagery that was in this poem was the best that I've seen so far on this site! You have a really awesome poetry talent. i like the wording you used! It described everything beautifully!
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This is absolutely amazing. The intensity felt when I read it is beyond words. There is so much to this, such a depth that is almost unfathomable.
There is one line that brought a little painful smile to my face:
"And every pasted smile is a ton of pressure in a sore mandible."
Being a TMJ patient, I loved this line. It took me away from the intense mode I was in reading this write but only for a moment just because it has a double meaning to me. Sometimes it is extra special when little things in something you write touch people in odd ways you would never expect.
Great job and thanks for sharing your work with us.
Victoria Lin -
I have to tell you that I have admired your work from afar for quite some time now. I was even telling my lady (Angelindiskyz) to please check out your incredible work. This piece, my friend, is the first that I HAD to comment on. For it is an ANTHEM. It is a LESSON in LIFE. It is not just a poem. It is something to read again and again, over and over, just to let in sink in and to LEARN from it. You are a gifted and amazing writer BEYOND BELIEF. I have spent HOURS reading your work when I should be performing the tasks here at my job that I get paid for. But hey, I deserve a bit of time to emmerse myself in your sea of unparalleled literal beauty. Your presense on this site is a BLESSING to all who have the need to write, to learn and to grow. Thank you for allowing us to share in what you are truly blessed at.
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it is sad, it hits hard, but very well written....sometimes I love reading poems that are a bit sad, it makes us return to our "humanitarian self" I guess...congratz and keep up the good work...
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First stanza really hits hard..I think it get the ball rolling, so to say ..sussurate ..now that is a great word
..I love to see explored vocabulary in poetry ..anyhow..yes, very sad. 
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oh wow... this is beautiful... and I see a little portion of your author page has been removed... Truely amazing poem darlin...
Trin
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wow. ppl like you tick me off.lol. no...im just jealous. rhymes come pretty easy, but it takes alot more to get smooth flowing, descriptive stuff. i love this. im at a loss for words. its great, for lack of better words.lol. i'll have to read your others later. you're very talented. great work.
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OH, gio....I thought it was beautiful...and sad...and I'm sorry.
Jenn
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