morning
birds sing their sweet songs
just as the sun has risen
welcoming the morn
comes the dawn once more
peeking over mountain tops
challenging the day
darkness overcome
old day just a memory
life begins to stir
dee garner
april 25, 2004
Author notes
Written April 25th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Contest for PARTNERS IN CRIME group. Anything about Nature by Partners In Crime.
500 points, ended July 22, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wow Dee, this is really good! Ive never tried a hiku triplicate before but perhaps I should. This is really beautiful
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In some ways the ending day is sad, then in other ways, it is a start to another new day inwhich I am always grateful for. Love the imagery thes haiku has given me, nicely done Thank you very much for the entry and good luck in the contest Partners N Crime
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Simply Gorgeous
This is simply gorgeous. I loved this piece so much. Well done and good luck.
keep writing
Countrybabe
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This is what I see and feel so many times, working the nightshifts, see the day starting..and the sun peeks too..but not over a mountaintop here, only buildings
But the rest fits it allAnd it feels good too, just as your poem
Good luck in this contest
XXJeannette
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A perfect way to start the day Good luck in the contest
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Well done
Dee, These are a lovely themed series of Haiku. Strong imagery which invite the reader to picture this in their own imagination. Well done, Dennis
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I love the morning...the birds always wake me with song!!!! Very nicely penned catz. ~Laura
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i always think of a comment said to me by a friend with the budgies are out
birdsong in the morning, what better music to start the day
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Excellent haiku catz, you have done a great piece, nice imagery too, and you have a pretty picture to go with it, nice one
best wishes as always
~Moonstone Virgo~
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I'm a huge fan of the haiku. I've never tried to write one and I don't think I could! These 3 haikus were great--each able to intertwine or stand alone. I also liked the picture you used too. I think it goes without saying that you have an array of talent!
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Lovely witha light brush
A lovely painting in words. I am going toread more of you now. Thank you -
Thank you, dianabluelove, for reading and for your very kind comment. As for the syllable count.... my Haiku's are usually in the traditional 5-7-5 count because that's the way I always thought Haiku form to be.....however, we have a wonderful Haiku guru here on allpoetry who teaches that there's more than just this syllable count. His logon is Haikumonk and if you enjoy reading and/or writing this form, I highly recommend him to you. He also teaches Haiku here in our allpoetry classes.
www.allpoetry.com/poet/haikumonk
He's a wonderful poet and a super guy
Dee
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This is so nice in its delicate simplicity. I wasn't patient enough to count your syllables but you definitely got the haiku spirit right. A wonderful haiku trilogy here.
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Wow this is such a pretty poem. Full of nice imagery. I like the idea of the haikus written together to make a bigger poem. You did an excellent job on this. Thank you for sharing.
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this is a wonderful haiku!
absolutely amazing
you have captured the essence of the morning
wow
I love it!
thanks for sharing
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Dee, this is some great Haiku. It takes a special quality of writing skills to paint a picture with so few words. You my dear have that quality. I truly love reading this kind of awesome work.
~ John
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As always, this rocked me boat, catz...
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applaudable
Dee this write is very pretty, very inspiring, very fresh-can almost feeldaybreak stir my soul
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very nice. I'm not sure if I've commented on this allready but anyway, if I did I do so again This shapes images of dawn perfectly. The first poem is the most concise in my oppinion but my favourite line is "challenging the day".
Almost There,
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stretches and yawns - what time is it eeek i am late i am late er hang on, i don't have to go anywhere, eek i am early i am early runs around flapping - looks for pen, where's my pen, have you nicked it - come on give it back lol
is a cool breeze of morning poem
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Haikus are about words to me. About the choice of words and how effective they are in displaying a strong feeling or message in a few words. I really like this trilogy of yours. Very powerful and very deep. Particularly the last one.
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I'd applaud if I had the hands...
I just love Haiku. These are worthy of Basho himself. Beautiful. -
tranquil & serene~
Beautiful haiku triology
It looked that way here at 5 30 this morning, damp, just enough fog for an enticing poem like this one
Luv it
Luv you too
Susan~~~
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I love early mornings...getting up before the day breaks so you catch some of the night sounds and then all of the early morning activity...birds singing, animals scurring to get back to their lairs before the sun comes up...all of this I enjoy here in my new home in the boonies...at least for a little while longer...
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Very pretty word pictures you have written.Here in the morning the sun seems to rise out of the saltwater canal back of my house.Never old always beautiful.
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Fantastic!!
Hi Dee,
You have expressed a feeling that is so powerful in these few lines. The majesty of the morning is captured here for all to enjoy. Thank you so very much for sharing this with me, and thank you for your lovely comment on my Mia: The Feeding, I appreciate it so very much!
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Myra, thank you for the comment, and that is exactly what I meant to do with this haiku trilogy ....
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Dee
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Dee
~Hey stranger!
Your photo is amazing!!!
I love the morning. My son loves it too, he wants to wake up at 5 a.m. just to smell it! Silly boy...he knows the beauty of nature. Refreshing haiku!
aimee jo -
Love it!
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how very quaint, simple, yet beautiful. There is an airiness in your words that is wonderful and dreamy. A lovely job here!
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This is really beautiful haiku's. I just walked 1 mile in the morn and it felt just like this poem excellent stuff and many thanks for all the comments!
Almost there,
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that was just beautiful.
Love and God Bless,
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Neat
Beautiful inspiring gems, reflecting the early morning sun. I love the way in which you stage the Grand Play: it is as if you lifted the drapes within the first haiku, opened the door in the second, and finally embraced the day ...
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Nice..
Great Poem... Makes me think of when I was smaller playing at my Girl Guide Camps, getting up at the break of dawn. It was Beautiful, just like this poem. Id like to read another one of your haikus. Thanks for sharing .
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smiling - nice imagery here, making me laugh though with a memory. ages ago me and a friend were out sort of camping in a graveyard, and he turned round to me and said - "the budgies are out" to the sound of the birds singing
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These are very nice Haiku Dee. (I think you are skating on thin Japanese ice tho' if you use o'r as one syllable! Why not just say 'over' and cut out the 'the' (which one tries to avoid in haiku anyway.) Well done. Applause.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh.
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A beautiful haiku that speaks so true of dawn.
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