What do you say
When you care about someone so much
And they just push you away
How do you make them see
That their friendship is all you need
You're closer than sisters could ever be
I don't think I have it in me anymore
I've been broken for too long
So please listen
I love you
Remember that when you are happy
and when you are heart broken
I am proud of you
Remember that when you succeed
and when you stumble
You don't need me to lift you up
You already have it all inside of you
Just let it surface
I may not be the best friend
but I am the best that I can be
And as you triumph throughout life
Know that I love you
and am so proud
know it
Author notes
Gold in xDarknessFallsx's contest allpoetry.com/Contest/588782
Written April 25th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- I Hate My Life (Inspire Me) by My Darkness.
400 points, ended April 26, 2004, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I was deleting all of my guestbook comments and i came across a message from you, and the link to this was in it... I didn't remember this, couldn't even say i thought about it.. But once again, i've read it and i realize that you and i will always have this bond between us.. No matter the distance or time away from one another, something has never truly been broken.. I feel like i've grown up right before your eyes, shit, you've known me since i was what? 14?.. and i turn twenty this year, that's wild Shawna.. Just crazy..lol You know something amazing, as well, every single time i feel down and out, i remember everything positive and heartfelt you've said to me.. I do honestly believe you have made me a stronger person, and i only wish i could give you that same feeling in return! Wow, i haven't sat and thought about our relationship in a long time, i will be honest though, at times it feels like you are only in my imagination.. So, here we are, coming to a new chapter in life, and yet there is still something missing (atleast for me)... I know i've told you atleast a million times I loved you, but until now I didn't realize how much i truly do.. So i can pretend all is well, and tell you i'm doing just fine, but this time i will be honest... Nothing is going well, i've been banished by my mother, disowned by my father, and i live within a mental hell.. But, you have taught me to take what i get and live life by my rules and to be happy with all i recieve.. One day i will make you proud, i swear it, i will do something that will make you say..that's my girl.. you deserve all the credit for the person i've become, or am aspiring to be... Ugh, sorry for the babble, i know you think i'm crazy, and you're probably right.. But hey we can't all be sane!!!! I miss you and i miss our talks, hopefully we can work out something so we can talk even just a little more...
you are a great gal, and your children are definately blessed.. by the way, i want to see that baby!!!!
Love you always and forever Ms. or shall i say Mrs. Shawna!!!!
-Crystal Diane Mares-
p.s.
I think i'll start calling you BS again..
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Awwwww this is so sweet...a true poem about friendship...what a wonderful write - congrats on the gold, while I didn't read the other entries, I'm sure they came nowhere near as good as yours!!!
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Great job whisper..I loved it..The emotion is great and it flows so evenly. Your work is all so wonderful..I wish you the bestest best of luck as always and I thank you for sharing such a beautiful poem with us all..Much love
Bambie -
Enjoyed this even though it's very differnt from things that I do. And, in checking the contest I see you got the gold - congrats, you've done a great job. I love "I may not be the best friend but I am the best that I can be". Great thought. Paul
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Hey you... Again.. we have more in common... We're both older sisters.. =/ It's a tuff position to be in eh??? I wrote a semi-similiar poem for my sister (you may have even already read it..)? lol.. but.. It's hard to watch them fall, and then we just get pushed away when we try to pick them up.. *sigh* I know... I know... Great write, I can feel and see the true emotion in this between you and your sister.. Sweet and precious.. Good luck!
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awwwww...how sweet! I wish I had friends like you! Hell, my friends used to just bum rides and steal my girlfriend! Very inspirational and a look at how undelfish we can be when we aren't so focused on ourselves. Great write!
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:'( I don't know what to say, this has to be the greatest write in the entire world...i am seriously crying, you lift me up whenever i'm down and you keep me going...If ever there was a love that was so real this would be it, I can't express in words what you and this means to me, this is so wonderful.. Thanks for entering and Good luck to you...
take care
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Wow that was amazing! I can't quite come up with the words to express why I liked this. You definitly should win a trophy for this! The flow, the content....I think we have all felt like this before. Great job and good luck!
Peace and love
Susan
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*bows*
this is wonderful. sometimes it's so hard to find the right words, when you talk all the time and everything just is accepted, but not really *heard* this makes them stop and listen, and know that no matter what. there you are. i love the honesty and love and pain here. wonderful job. -
this is a great/interesting poem.
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Sometimes pushing someone away is done out of love, albiet incredibly detrimental to the relationship, can sometimes be done out of overprotectiveness, or even the idea that getting to close could hurt the other. Not all situations like this could be interpreted as that. But from my own experience, pushing someone away is definetley not the same as taking one for granted. thanks for the poem.
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This poem was just perfect till I got to your authors comment! You have expressed such emotion in this piece! Great job
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Super
I think this will resonate with a lot of people, it actually reads a lot like one of those "prayers" that people email each other to give their friends hope. I really like those, someone should start off a chain email with this, I'm sure everyone would appreciate receiving a gem like this in their inbox. Thanks! -
this is lovely and well written and i particularly love the forced ending its so easy to forget how one is lovedand to take things for granted it makes me feel sad really.
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that is such a sweet poem. it's so great. i really like it. very nice write, i like the emphasis on certain phraises with italics... it really makes the poem easy to read. great job, keep up the great work
and for writing this... i think you are a good best friend... no matter what u think
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Good job, I liked it, it expressed alot, good luck! -
*claps* Very good! It's also very true. I have no doubts that this will win at least a bronze in the contest. If not- shame on the judge!
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wow.. this is really good.. would you mind if i posted this on my journal?..
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