He stands at the border of my thresh-
old. I invite him to enter.
He crosses over, kisses
me, leaves; returns the next
day, conversed, left once
again. I sit
in solace.
My door
closed.
by Gregg Rowe
He stands at the border of my thresh-
old. I invite him to enter.
He crosses over, kisses
me, leaves; returns the next
day, conversed, left once
again. I sit
in solace.
My door
closed.
He stands at the border of my thresh-
old. I invite him to enter.
He crosses over, kisses
me, leaves; returns the next
day, conversed, left once
again. I sit
in solace.
My door
closed.
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Written April 24th, 2004
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Beautiful and so deep for so few words. If you aim to clench at readers hearts....you do that well.
Blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Tehre's a lot of emotion, come back in a few days and read it again, nonets do that to you...see something different with each read, each line, thanks for racing around in my library, posting a new poem up, doing a poetry colloboration with lady and thinking of a contest to enter but I will read some of yours before thenight is finished still have two hours
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Hmmm, I really like this piece, it's interesting to see the different thoughts on it in the comments as well. Perhaps I'm mistaken here, but I don't feel a whole lot of emotion there, actually more of a sense of "there goes another one and really I can't be bothered with opening the door to my heart anymore" I think that happens to most of us, once we've had our heart tromped of a few dozen times or so. Either way, I think it's does have a certain attitude within it that I find very alluring, making me wonder just what's ticking there
Very nicely done, as always 
Peace and Blessings, Gyspy
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I love the picture that this piece paints in my mind. It reminds me very much of being lonely... for example, some one coming into your life for only but a split second, and they touched you in a way you will never forget but you never see them again... does that make sence?
Ive never read a nonet before,,, but this write makes me want to read more of them.. thanks for sharing!
Kayla Dawn -
Beautiful poem, written very well and i like the pic as well..keep up the good work, lookin forwrd to more
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I was wondering: What do you do to get him to come bacK? How do you get him to seal the kiss of death upon you?
Great write.
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A nonet is a short poem that has 9 syllables in the first line working it's way down to 8 in the second, 7 in the third, 6 in the fourth, 5 in the fifth, 4th in the sixth, 3 in the seventh, 2 in the eight and 1 in the ninth, and cannot be written any other way, thus the shortness of the poem and the tightness of the words chosen to achieve some meaning within the fram of the structure.
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....i find this poem curious. it's short, which i'm personally not used to, but i like it. i think, though, that it's missing something. i'd like to hear more of your emotions at this person's coming and going. take my suggestion or disregard-whatever you wanna do
just a strange fact. i just finished reading a book about Vampires and how you have to invite them into your home before they can suck your blood. that's what i thought about when first reading your poem (not your fault, mine!)
good luck, keep writing!
-mindguru -
Hmm..in solace suggests it is peaceful after the second leaving, at least to me. I like this format..but them, as far as form, I prefer shorter form poetry to longer Seems to me ..(just a personal opinion) it offers more creative license...nicely done though.
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Perhaps it is just my foul mood, but this has a bitter taste of melancholy, though beautiful in its quiet sadness. I can't deny it made me think of someone who broke my heart. But that was a fleeting memory that quickly dissolved.
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yes indeed
Beautifully simple and to the point. If we all just had poems like that the world would be a nicer place don't you think? Well I do anyway.....
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