Walker:
Oh mighty moon, what secrets you must hold,
as you continue to shine, so bright and bold,
wise and true, you always do shine through,
bringing peace to all, who will trust in you.
Moon:
Thank you sweet walker, each night we speak,
I know of your love, and your hope you do seek,
my ever watchful eye, searches the distant sea,
looking for signs your love will return to thee.
Walker:
I stand here patiently, as I have for many nights
still his ship has come no where into your sights.
Each night I pray, for he's now been gone so long,
such faith I have in your watchful gaze; so strong.
Moon:
I look far off, scanning well each of the horizons,
for you can trust in me to see, that you can rely on.
Each time, I do rise and descend over you nightly,
my search is intense and never ever taken lightly.
Walker:
To no other would I dare, by mouth to profess,
how very much Ido miss my lover's gentle caress.
passion we shared, bathed in the glow of your light,
as we laid close to one another beneath you at night.
Moon:
I remember those times; to the end of night I did rush,
as dawn rushed upon you, I was draped in red blush.
That is why I give my all to see your love come back,
for without what you share, I would dim and turn black.
Walker:
Tis' not me that makes you glow, but your lover's heart,
nor from your wisdom, you surely must know this part.
dawn will soon be upon us, so rest well my dear moon,
I know you will lead my love back home to me soon.
Moon:
I know, I am on my way for another of your special days,
I will keep a lookout; I must speed quickly on my way,
tho your love is deep and sometimes does eclipse me,
for now I must part, but wait, wait, what's that I do see.....!
Author notes
12. Write a collaboration on anything. Partner(s) must be from AP.
This was written to a picture called moon walker. It decipted a woman on a shore with the moon high in the sky, it seemed as if h had a face. To me the picture seemed alive and with this poem I felt I brought it to life. I hope you enjoy what we did.
I collaberated with princeoffire on this, he is the moon. So if you comment here it would be greatly appreciated if you would take time to do the same for his
allpoetry.com/Poem/599879. God Bless You
Written April 24th, 2004
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Comments
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WOW This is a very cool poem. I really enjoyed the conversation between the Moon and the lovelorn. I was drawn in from the first line and held captive till the very end. Your rhyme rhythm and flow was done quite well.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Bill
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I am unsure as to why you would enter this poem in this contest since it is dependant on a picture that we don't have any rights to publish.
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Thank you so much for your entry into my contest, your talent and hard work are very much appreciated. I liked this poem, the fact that you wrote each stanza as a conversation between the moon and a person, very unique and a grand addition to this already talent filled competition. I liked the little cliffhanger at the end, very good. Loved it, and good luck in the contest. Great job.
Tiphanie -
This is the first collab of the contest. I like it. I found it to be pretty smooth and well done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is beautiful, and very romantic. I like how the person is conversing with the moon. It's very original. Excellent job on this. Thanks for entering, and good luck!
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This poem is written so beautifully. I am like in awe. I love the way you made a conversation up between a walker and the moon. The imagery was just beautiful. Keep up the awesome poetry!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Such a good job and it surely is the first poem I ever read like this, the woman speaks to her moon, and the moon speaks back, its an interesting idea, in fact I really like it, I would love to see the picture that inspired this, if you still have it. This was again such a lovely poem. :0
-Ash
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Are we looking at the sun, earth and moon or have I missed it? It is extremely good work. An obvious ballad, I would give a different melodies to Walker and the moon. Maybe change the melody in the last stanza as well. If you want to collaborate on this one, I'd like it. I think there are some Rhythmic changes I would want to make for a better flow as a song.
Andy -
This is written really well, I am especially impressed with the flow considering that two people wrote it! Good luck!
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wow..this is really good....it flows really well and the imagery is awesome...its unique in a great way...wonderful job!thanx for entering!
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I love the way you used the picture to open up one`s mind to your wonderful poetry, the poem is beautifully written and it is a real pleasure to read too.
thankz for sharing
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happy scribbling
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What a beautiful conversation between the walker and the moon. You both did a wonderful job with collaborating this poem. It was interesting, and I truly enjoyed reading it
Thank you for entering my contest and take care.
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This is really neat. It's defently different and unique and I really enjoyed reading this. You two did a great job on this. Thanks for sharing and entering, always keep writing. ~Karli~
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"I do remember those times, as to the end of night I did rush,
dawn came upon you showing me with a red blush.
That is why I give my all to see your love back,
for without what you share, I will surely turn black."
The red blush at dawn is enthralling. The assurance the moon gives is so very soothing and the calm trust and hope of the walker is so inspiring. A treat for those who have hoped.
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fantastic
awesome, just , awesome. you've written something very very beautiful. it's something i'll cherish. definately bookmarking this one.
sincerely,
Leo Long -
good
i must confess your style is remarkable...nothing compares to the flow of passion and the loneliness in our hearts ...i feel loved in your light -
I am left in awe of the beauty and extravagance of this poem. You have truly outdone yourself. The conversation between the walker and the moon, so elegant and capturing. The easy flow with which you told your story. The consistant and rhythmic rhyme scheme was delightful. I definitely fell in love with this one. If I hadnt found it here, I'd have thought it was surely written by one of the famous greats. Excellent job. Oh and the collaboration idea was superb (i like that word teehee). I've down a few but they never came out so beautifully. You inspire me to try once again.
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Oh my fucking god, this poem was amazing. your emphasis and repition ont he word moon proves your worth as a wonderful writer, because the effect that it has on the reader is truly empowering. I loved this poem. The mysterious walker, your search, your hopes and love for the moon and iof your search. Your.. i mean, it was just great. How one could physically do all that in one poem, was a mystery until now. Good Job.
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Ahh...This piece expands wonderfully on your other entry. The flow also works alot better. I love the rhyme and the dialogue between the walker and the moon; it's a beautiful idea.
Except, there's but one thing I have to harp on: I'm only accepting one prewrite per person. I've already had to bring this to the attention to someone else, so I feel it's only fair that I bring it to your attention as well. I'm not going to disqualify you or anything, but it would help me out enormously if you could contact me somehow (through im or comment) and let me know which poem you'd rather have judged. If you don't get back to me, I'll have to choose myself (and I'd really hate to choose between the two.)
Anyway, sorry to have to annoy you with this,
Bec -
i love this tale of enchantment love and hope. YOu both work well together!
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great
this is really good. both of you did a great job. i think that you two make a good team. my favorite part of this poem is
Tis not me that makes you glow, but love from lover's hearts,
from your wisdom, you surely must know this part.
this poem has so much meaning and i enjoyed reading it over and over. keep up the work you have true talent! -
very lovely...nicely penned..long, but worth the read..beautiful poem..enjoyed!
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I loved working on this with you, you're a wonderful talent, though undiscovered. I will enjoy doing so with you more in the future.
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This is again a good collaboration between the two of you, you do write well together, well done an excellent piece......Take care and good luck in the contest.
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wow....it was a very beautiful poem, and i think the best part about it was that it deosnt keep on talking about the same thing, like the lost love or the woman's longing...but i could also notice the emphasis on the moon's steady comfort like the woman's fidelity, her love is as faithful as the moon that cherishes the adoration of all lovers in the world. its wonderful how the poem stays interesting till the end, never gets monotonous or stale. and the end! moment of unanimoous exultation. really great. and great idea of making the poem in the form of a conversation between the walker and the moon...best of luck in the contest. and i agree with you that the painting is very intriguing and mystifying....your poem does justice to its possibilites. good job!
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is silent in awe
is in awe...brilliant poem, and the best collaboration I've seen...
know I am on my way for another of your days,
I will still keep lookout as I speed on my way,
for your love is deep and sometimes does eclipse me,
but now I must part, but wait, wait, what's that I see
This last stanza was definately my favorite! Keep writing!
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wow. that was incredible, amazing work to both of you!
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Brilliant...
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