Drowned,
Headfirst in Hell's flames,
Gasping,
Grasping,
Grabbing for oxygen
With each inhale.
Torn,
Wings lay disheveled,
Broken,
Bruised,
Brushing the hot ground
With each careful whisk.
Fallen,
Soon to be redeemed,
Trying,
Trudging,
Trusting in the Holy Sanctity,
The sacred balm for wounds.
Floating,
Hanging in midair,
Whining,
Warring,
Worrying an angel's fate,
Hoping it is not too late.
Ascending,
Through the tunnel Darkness,
Roaring,
Rising,
Riding hope's wings
Up through hell's black flames.
Breaking,
The barrier of night,
Crying,
Cruising,
Crossing the last strip of Hell
To the river of light.
Soaring,
Above the clouds,
Entangled,
Embellished,
Embraced by the light
That has brought sight to his night.
Author notes
Written April 24th, 2004
A contest entry
- Iohagh's Birthday Party Over Here by Abdul T Alishtari.
300 points, ended December 25, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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All my past Goth
and your present wrath
such poem it wrought
from your darkest path.
Thanks for your gift. Happy Xmas -
WOW! you sound like a writer right up my alley...what is all this thing about being part of an angels group?
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fugee My niece sent me this IM "I love everyone. I love you all. Boy I'm acting silly. Later on I'll be embarassed. Screw it that is then and this is now. I love you guys. Ciao now."
God bless you guys. -
Iohagh is very accepting and she will love your poem. I thank you for my niece.
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Good Write
Your poem is very good. I really enjoyed reading it.
One of the rules of this contest is that you are a member of the Angels Group. I checked and saw you never joined therefore your poem can not be part of the contest.
I am sorry you did not read or follow the rules.
God is blessing you!
Dawn -
This is a good poem, but in my rules I specifically stated that no deity was to be mentioned. You probably will not win a trophy, as I made that one single rule clear and bold...
However, the imagery and word choice is amazing. The way you painted a picture in my head, it will linger on even after i'm finished reading. Excellent, excellent job, truely stunning and beautiful. This is a wonderful poem. -
I absolutely loved the form to this write.The descriptive words to paint the scene were fabulous. Great write...very smooth.Best of luck and blessed be
~~Serenity~~
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Wow, I really enjoyed reading this poem.. and I thought the format of the poem was ingenius. Very creative and unique. The second to last stanza just really really stood out to me. Don't know why, but it just seems to convey a more powerful tone than the rest. Anyway, great poem =)
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Sharon, I went and read your Broken Wing trilogy, they were very melodic and rhythmic. I like how you alluded to Poe's Raven, "Quote the raven nevermore." I enjoy reading your poems.
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this is really cool, the power in this poem. I like the violent vocabulary you used, it really helps drive the message through. Nice write
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this was very good...i liked how you added the adjective and then the verb...i liked this alot!!!
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Beautifully Penned
Once again
My new old friend
this love songs flow like a love song of mine
I am not sure if I put this song on this sight
but you can see my song
Broken Wings
Upon the golden bleu pages of www.poetry.com
seach for an artist Sharon Corr
and then scroll down until you see
Broken Wings
Namaste
Blessed Be -
GOOD!!!
Good job!! The type of stanza you picked is perfect, it makes your poem read better. I like the subject matter, interesting words like 'embellished' that fit your topic well.
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