WOMAN
I went to the doctor to see why I tick
He said it was obvious, "You are love sick."
"I can tell by your eyes you have been smitten.
It is by a love bug you have been bitten."
I groaned and gasped, "Can you help me?"
"Get rid of this feeling of being empty."
He said, "There's only one cure for your disease.
That quickens your pulse and weakens your knees."
"The touch of a woman is what you've been missing.
A large dose of hugs and plenty of kissing."
I asked him, "Doc are you quite certain?
This prescription will stop me from hurtin."
He nodded his head then he replied,
"What you need son is a woman by your side."
I asked him once more, "Will I recover?"
"Yes," he explained, "Take one woman and love her."
Now I patiently wait for this miracle drug
I hope I can find a woman's kisses and hugs
The prescription he wrote I needed to fill
When you came along, you fit the bill
Kisses and hugs you gave me plenty
The doctor was right I feel better already
Til I found you on insanity I bordered
You were just what the doctor ordered
For me a woman keeps the sickness at bay
Her hugs and her kisses are needed each day
The woman I found is like no other
She cares for me and I dearly love her
LEO LONG
01-10-2003
Author notes
My prescription for true love.
Written January 10th, 2003
by leo2
member since April 24, 2004
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A contest entry
- Favorites Only Please! Thank You! by poetryality.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 46 entries
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just simply marvelous you have a winner in my book. wonderful flow of words and detail is awsome. It was a pleasure to read
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Renee
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This has humor
and as everyone knows love has a wonderful sense of humor. Make sure you hold her tight and give her all the hugs and kisses she needs ('tween you and me ladies suffer from it too) I love the sweetness to this it shows that you cherish the little things that aren't so very little. -
Ah ha! Found one...
I love this and agree wholeheartedly with you physician! LOL A man needs a woman and a woman needs a man. It's simple arithmetic. Nature says so. Excellent. I see you came on the scene with expert rhymes. Loved It!
Always ♥
Renee
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truly right, love is the best medicine :-) you have so much wonderful poetry, I don't know how I'm ever going to get through it all!! but I'm champing at the bit after each one to read the next. It's no wonder your book got published. this poem has a great rythm, occasionally I had to reread some lines to make them fit properly. I like the humorous approach to love, a bit like a doctor doctor joke but with a very sweet ending. fantastic.
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it rocked
i can so relate i just got over my last boyfriend this is a great poem -
What a great piece. It is cute and sincere and filled with what life is really all about. What a great tribute to the one you love too. Your humor in this piece is soft and gentle and it leads the reader to the eventual meeting with your miracle drug really well. I am so glad I am on a mission to read your work today!!!
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Super powered
fANTASTIC!!! a great expression for the greatest expression on or off of this planet. -
good
this was good no matter what anyone else says. hopefully you have a woman to love and hold closely.... IM me if you want to talk and if it's okay, can i add you to my favorites? i loved your poems and i really wanna read them over and over and over and over... well, keep up the good work because i really enjoyed these -
aw that was really cool. i loved it! great piece
funny and romantic....very unique style, i really really enjoyed it!
lone
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this is too cute. i never would have thought to put it this way but they do say that those who have someone special in their lives tend to live longer. great write and i see nothing to be critical about. viyanna rosemarie
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this is such a lovely poem its obviously written for your wife. I bet she was sooooo proud of it. I know I would have been
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Your poem is entertaining and romantic at the same time. I enjoyed reading the story about the meeting of this woman. Your words express your feelings about her and what she does for you. Very nicely done!
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excellent
To me this writing is so deep into a soul that longs for the true love of a woman. I myself can identify with these words & this poet has hit the nail on the head. A man need a woman, & a woman needs a man to be complete. -
This is very heart warming and enjoyable to read. I was wondering where you were going to get that prescription filled. Would have been a large bag. Nice writing and flowed very smoooooth.
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Hi there,it simply washed me off.A fantastic job done here, rythem, ryhme.. evertything is so perfect and it replenished my mood.each line i could visualize with scenes and enjoyed thoroughly.. Anu
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Another good piece with form, rhyme and style. Great.
Personally I would have gone for slightly tighter rhyming like this
I asked him, "Doc are you quite sure?
This prescription will produce a certain cure."
and perhaps this
Now I patiently wait for this miracle drug
I hope I can find a woman to kiss and to hug
But your versions worked for you so ignore or not as you wish, after all you managed recover and love her.
Jim S -
Agree with all those above. This is a delicate and humourous poem which describes love in a beautiful way, as something we all search for. You made me smile and feel warm inside, as though there is a reason...Thank you. x
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What a very beautiful and tender poem! Done in a fun way. Reminicent of the song.. "doctor, doctor, give me the news"
Such a tender heart you have.........and such a lucky lady that has it.
~Michelle~
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Awww that is soooooo sweet. I think i might have to cry after reading that. It really cam from the heart great job.
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So I get to post right after Master Dragon, eh? Looks like I'm still alive, so he must not have really had too much of a problem with the contest! lol! I thought that this was a very beautiful poem. Maybe it's conceited, but I like to think that, from his actions, that Master Dragon feels the same way as the ending of this poem. Very beautiful and full of love. Many thanks for entering this poem!
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This was a very a nice poem, great flow. I really enjoyed reading it. Although I'm going to kill dragons-sky for making a contest centered around be.
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Thanks for entering my contest! I thought this was a great poem, so heartfelt and beautiful. I'll be posting a more in depth comment after the contest closes.
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Excellent
I loved this
such a ray of sunshine 
well done and good luck in the contest
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Hiya Leo...this is so sweet, flawless flow of rhythm and rhyme. When I think of what would make one happy, I believe this is the most difficult to find, at least to last more than a day.
Lovely.
Desiree
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kisses and hugs can be everybody's prescription for happiness ...I like this ....good luck in the contest.. freda
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Oh, talk about what the doctor ordered, very nice, gave me a smile and neat way of putting it, you know, as you did, in this form, with the rhythm, rhyme and the Doc telling you and you, Oh, the ending does bring a smile, doya' know how lucky you are, uhm, guess you do!
Good Luck to you and Thanks!
mi -
love love love love love love and hugs and kisses you cant beat that for happiness and contentment ah
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Absolutely precious! I love the meaning and the rhyme is wonderful!
Great work here!
Take Care-TGR (Theresa) -
aw thats nice great rhythm you got there too
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excellent penning
aww,that was awesome!! stupendous!! funny and very sweet!! yup,love is a beautiful thing,when it's true!! keep up the great work,i bow to you!! much respect from one writer to another!!this definitely made me smile,hugs NBF=
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haha. great write! keep writing
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This was a pleasure to read. Truth with a delightful touch of humor. Those darn love bugs are worse than the bed bugs! I particularly liked your opening lines because the reminded me of a line by the great Winnie the Pooh, "He's been bitten by a smitten!"
Thanks for sharing and auditioning! Elaina
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First, thanks for entering my contest. I really liked this poem. It was a total joy to read. Keep up the excellent work and I look forward to reading more of your writings!!
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This is really sweet and funny
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Hmm... I feel like I've read this (or something similiar) in a email chain letter type dealy... If it's an original - that can be taken as a big compliment. Whatever I remember reading, was great. And this is even better. Good for Hallmark! Sweet and *ahh* love!
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Ahhhh.... Love
Cool poem. Such light flow on the take of love. And I love it how you refer to a scene where you go to the doctor to talk about the emptiness you feel because of the lack of love of a woman you don't receive...
This piece was all right, it was good
-Abby Eyeball-
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Aww! That's really cute and sweet and I love it. It made me smile. The ending is great. The rhyme and flow are almost flawless. Great poem. Thanks for sharing. Keep it up. Good luck in the contest. I'm sure you'll win.
~Miranda
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This is really cute, this has a nice up beat to it. Even a bit of humor. Wonderful write! I love it!
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Awwwwwwwwwwww! this is cute. Gotta give props to your rhyming skills! Keep writing my friend!
Razzle Dazzle
Jillian PS -
honestly i'm a bit overwhelmed by the gracious reception of my work. most of work is very personal.i do appreciate all the comments...... thanks again
sincerely
leo long -
Sweet & Funny
AWWWWWWWWW.... This is a great mix of humor and love. It's so cute. I hope you o well in your contest!!
Cheers!,
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I love this poem it is very very good! you did a great job at keeping the rhyming up trough th poem! Great job beautiful write! I wish someone would right one like that about me...lol
well good peom
God bless
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So nice to read something that isn't dark and deep, keep up the good work.
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great work, this 1 rocks! i need to get to the clinic, pronto!
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Great write...very sweet indeed. I am glad you found that women to make you happy.....not just once, but twice.
Cheryl -
That is such a sweet poem, nicely paced. Sometimes, it seems doctors do know best hey? He didn't try and pescribe anything while you where there? You know doctors...
...lovely to find love lovely...
~Ody~
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