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No Matter what.

The Intoxicating Potion,
That is the love you gave to me.
I'm just so happy to be yours,
So excited that we're meant to be.

My Heart And Soul Yearn For you,
And everything you do or say.
I can't ask for anything more,
I don't want it any other way.

I stare into your deception,
Into your darkened Hollow Eyes.
I stare deep into your soul,
Failing to find any lies.

Sometimes I feel so empty,
Like I'm Worthless to your heart.
Sometimes I feel so hated.
And I feel like I'm falling apart.

And when I feel Blind Sided,
And I feel like I'm gonna die,
You turn everything around for me.

Author notes

Intoxicating Potion.
My Heart And Soul Yearn For You.
Hollow Eyes.
Worthless
Blind Sided...

I don't care- FRED WEARS SLACKS! - I know you didn't ask for it, but I put it in there anyways! it sounded cool...Hope ya liked it!
Written April 20th, 2004

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  • Soulful Tears
    May 17, 2004
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    GREAT

    hey kati-lynn. wow!! i love this poem. it has to be one of my favs of yours. i love the feeling that seems to be behind each word. i can tell you felt every word as you wrote this poem. i really loved it. talk to you at school. love you - PJ


  • luckhole
    May 1, 2004
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    damn all these poems are so good, unique, and well written, am starting to wish i'd read them before i entered, sigh, oh well. the only thing about this is i felt left hanging at the end, with the rhyme scheme being what it is in my head i expected on more line. still an awesome write, of course! best of luck!


  • mymymyohface
    April 23, 2004
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    well first of all i REALLI liked ur topic. alot of feelin in the poem and all i realli like that. u did an awesome job on makin it flow!!!! n e ways i have no clue who fred was but yea... and GOOD LUCK in the contest!!! hope u do well!!! later ~Death


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 22, 2004
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    Very nicely done! Meaningful and describes alot of 'loves' lol The good parts and the self esteem issues we all go through at not thinking we are worthy as well. Best of luck in the contest


  • Lo0opy
    April 21, 2004
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    Nice job on this Sounds like it fits on the same lines as the last poem I wrote..'Is My Search Over?'...that you feel like you've found someone so special and they make you feel the same...but you still have those thoughts in the back of your mind telling you that something just has to go wrong cuz it seems like something always does...well...at least that's what I get from this Again, great job and thanx so much for entering!
    nice to see Fred in there too hehe

    ~~T~~


  • Dead Emo Kid
    April 21, 2004
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    ooho tis was good...i like very much so.. and its still 11:30 here so... HAPPY 4:20!! hahaha loved the poem sweety! hope u win! cuz YOU ROCK MY SOCKS!
    *Kerry*

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