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Solicitous Science

Missing image

 

With designs to perceive
Nothing
Nothingness eats hope greedily with
‘I don’t belong to this world’
Finality

 

An incredible mile smile creates vacuity
While passing by & stealing hearts

 

Speech fever spent in fleeting youth
Calling into the hour of soft shadows
Audience smiles glow like
Bubbles rising in sunlight water
Scattered puddles of light-like memories remain

 

Truth disappears only
After you notice it

On the surface of a lonely neuralgia
Until numb eyes reflect ocean in the heavens
Everything changed yet nothing is different
Like a month of Sundays without a Sabbath
My whole world has proved to be nothing

 

Nothing but a closed mouthed
Philosophical hiccough

 

Society vomits words over my head
Like flies ready to devour its food.
With bitter joy they point, saying, see?
Look at him!  His redoubtable event dissolves
Because his tests are translucent…

 

Like fresh water percolating and
Washing clean an illegal conclusion?

 

System failure
Virus scans with pessimistic sparkles
Fail to the capture the obeisant shadow
Of beautifully adorable follies
Who after a split second

 

Silently defends insanity by
Sharing it

 

SIN IN THE SUN

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Written April 19th, 2004

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  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    October 7, 2004
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    I've hardly slept in says. Thanks for coming back. It helps me feel like I'm a member of the human race to know somebody cares who doesn't have to care. Thanks (yes, I suppose that sounded strange). PTL ET


  • pulsating
    October 6, 2004
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    hi there,
    lots of sarcasm to me in this piece. feeling underappreciated perhaps i detected in a little bit of this for some odd reason. Going into an argument you have to be open-minded and that fails to happen at times. Sometimes the finality of it is "whatever" i don't even need to be here, you are right and I'm wrong and thats that. I see lots of points in this. People just don't want to listen to reason and that's how it goes. Sad but true. Been on both sides, will continue to be on both sides on the coin in life. A lovely write you have here. take care. Olivia

  • MollysWall
    May 12, 2004
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    You truely are an Enigma! Wonderful use of metaphor -not sure I figred it out, I felt like what was just in reach suddenly disappeard; became unobtainable. Made me feel empty. I really am in awe of your style...
    ~M~


  • illustriousbuddha
    April 25, 2004
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    interesting

    i wasn't sure i got the gist of this
    unless it says you're disenchanted
    with all that had enchanted you
    and look upon past obsessions as folly

    all truth is relative

  • -Dawn-
    April 23, 2004
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    Ah indeed my friend

    What wonderful words you chose for this! And you created the sweetest sounds as well. You carefully crafted this poem and I truly appreciate it.


    Your content leaves so much to ponder {as all your poetry does in its own way} This left me with so many different feelings. A part of me felt that your words were mulling over a world without meaning and perhaps your search for your own meaning within that {perhaps coming up short}

    My own feelings on this of course and that is because your wonderful metaphors make it so.


    Remarkable writing Timothy


    ~~Dawn


  • Blondita
    April 21, 2004
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    Ouch ET !The vitriol just races down the page with this one. A very caustic write by all accounts...seems like years of pent up anger transferred into poetic form...

    This is a genius write - seems the underlying message is is one of complete isolation - being misunderstood in entirety...and resentment towards yourself ? someone in particular ? the world at large ?

    Some of the lines in this left me in awe...thou art a talent to be reckoned with sire !

    Class write - hope all is okay across the pond...

    ~ sonia ~ X


  • Meridian
    April 21, 2004
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    Amazing!

    WOW! I really enjoyed reading this, what a piece of literature. The way you write reminds me a lot of my brother's style. He has the same ability of linking and flowing his poetry, which is completely made up of his random thoughts on society. I've always secretly envied him for being able to do that, but ssh! Don't tell him! Anyway moving on, this is a fantastic piece of writing, the entire structure is brilliant. It's so well worded and flows beautifully from beginning to end. There are countless lines that really jumped out at me, the one reading
    'Silently defends insanity by
    Sharing it'
    I just love this. What a talent you are, simply awesome. X X

  • xluryan
    April 19, 2004
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    i can see that you're pretty passionate about writing. at least, that's how you come across to me. and that's cool. sometimes it's hard to be so passionate about society, because sometimes it seems like the harder you think about it, the uglier our race is. but it's at times like those when i start to think about all the good we've accomplished in our lives. and i myself know that i'm doing something good every time i make someone else smile. that kinda thing makes me feel good all over.

    a line that hit me:

    "Like a month of Sundays without a Sabbath"

    isn't it amazing how we lose track of what should be important to us all. but what do we attribute to our forgetfullness or blatent disregard? life getting in the way? what a horrible excuse. more like our ill ordered priorities getting in the way of life. we all need to step back and keep things simple. often i find that happiness works well in the presence of simplicity. and one of my bigggest philosiphies of life is merely this: be truly happy by making other's happy. or something like that. just think of how the world could be if we all lived like that. i dunno, maybe it wouldn't work. can love exist without hate; joy without pain? i'll probably never experience the truth first hand, which is a shame, but i can always dream...

    and so can we all.

    VERY nice poem. have a nice night :-)


  • Nyx Iscariot
    April 19, 2004
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    vacuity.
    what a wonderfully beautiful word. and i can see why you picked it in this piece.
    especially because you write about society.
    very hollow and empty. acts, speeches, feelings.

    sin in the sun = everyday life?

    N...

  • ragescage
    April 19, 2004
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    this was very well written. i give u high five. but i find myself, as an immature, maybe not as literate as u are on those large words, maybe child....i get lost a bit. but its still very cool, because i understood and it was great. i can not bash any of it. u have a good immagination and great vocabulary to work with. good job

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