I've seen the creatures no one sees
the nymphs and sprites and small faeries.
I've watched them go about their day
encouraging nature to grow and play.
I've watched them talk to birds in the trees
Move about orchards and play with the bees.
They dance and sing and fly about
as the sun goes down and the stars come out.
At night they swim in shallow puddles
and blow up shimmering rainbow bubbles.
With crowns of flowers round their brows
they sit on tree limbs and they drowse.
And never once have I thought to try
to speak to them, I don't know why.
But it seems to me a magical dance
and as I watch I'm in a trance.
So I'll keep silent and let them be
but never forget the magic I see.
Author notes
*For Contest*
Option # 4
Written April 19th, 2004
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Aww, I love this. You know, I talk to faeries all the time. ^_^
Thanks for entering,
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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i love this... and i love how it kindof portrays a moral to it.
overall loved it.
best luck
~lostelvnechild
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beautifully written! this flows very nicely!
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Awsome. Pure joy to my eyes. I love a good rhyme, and you did just that. I love a good flow, you did it right on the money. 2good. Thank you for sharing N take care. Tori
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lovely really enjoyed it!!
good luck
anax -
*claps* oh this is so beautiful... I do believe in fairies, I do belive in fairies... I loved this poem, awesome job
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Perfect and nice penned poem-story about fairies. It flows great, rhyme is nice and it is not too long and not too short. Good luck in contest, you deserved gold.
~Sonja~
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Very nice
Very nice. I enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest. Shancy. -
Wonderfull!
And again... I AM A FAN OF RHYMED POETRY!!! That was magnificant! I loved it! So compassionate - the way you talk about the fairys - althought they are not real creatures. But who knows... If you say that they exsist and you SAW them... then I can think again.... -
This is amazing, I love this. Good luck in the contest and very well done.
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Awwww, this is beautiful! The description and imagery is subtle yet intense, i love the lines
"At night they swim in shallow puddles
and blow up shimmering rainbow bubbles." they are really beautiful, and i can see the bubbles in my mind. Very cute . The rhyming was unforced, which helped the poem flow nicely with the steady rhythm. Great poem, i enjoyed it immensly. Keep the ink flowing hun, and thank you for entering my contest 
xxx
-dragonfly-
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I agree this is a very sweet poem. You did a great job in describing the playful and beautiful fairies. Awesome write, good luck in the contest!
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Aww its a really sweet poem^^ and you chose the picture wisely
, good luck in the contest
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You should try interacting with those faeries! *smiles*
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Fabulous write.I LOVE LOVE LOVE fae.This shows the sweetness of childhood dreams and magic.The magic it takes to believe in fairies...in pixie dust....in dreams coming true.Blessed be on such a fabulous write....you are truly talented.
~~Serenity~~
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"good write"
just kidding, but i is a really good write. i feel this way too. and i agree with you "never forget the magic you see." its all we have left in this dieing world
~*Blessed be*~ -
So I'll keep silent and let them be
but never forget the magic I see
and I will never forget the magic I read...freda -
This is cute..I have enjoyed this one very much..It is lovely..Maybe if you asked them..they would get mad and not wantt to dance for you no more..SHHH be quiet..lol Great Job!! Thank you for entering and i wish you lots of luck..
Much love
Bambie -
Awwww, I love this poem! Normally I hate simple rhyming sequences like you've used, but it really complemented the content of this form to have a nice simple and elegant form. It was almost playful, if that makes any kind of sense. Your faeries are beautiful, and you get that across wonderfully. The image is expressed very simply but beautifully, and it is very evocative. By the way, thank you very much for spelling faeries properly. ^_^ That wins you points in my book!!!
Dancing in the silver shadows
Arien Silverleaf -
Awesome
Very well written! I loved the general flow of the poem! Nice work... keep writing :-) -
He he i like this, very light hearted and pretty.
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Very nice
Great images, and even though it has nothing to do with the words themselves, I love the backgrounds and pictures you used. =) I can picture their dance, their fluttering wings, the little place where you're watching them. Great job.
You're beautiful. =)
Elizabeth -
I like the imagery, I can picture your chosen topic clearly. Not many people write about this sort of thing. You chose a good topic. Very good write
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I love this poems I love fairies. you have captured my imagination with this poem. great write love it
rock on
kami -
I didn't see anything wrong with this poem... it is well written... very descriptive and flowed well... all in all I would say it was a very good poem
take care and god bless
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Well, here it is... The cirtque you asked for even though its not being promoted anymore : )
Over all I was looking for something wrong with it and Im sure If I look hard enough I might but I might not. The point is in the 4 times I read it over I could find nothing wrong with it really. At first this part confused me:
But it seems to me a magical dance
and as I watch I'm in a trance.
But thats just because I was being dull and didnt read it right so There was really nothing wrong with it either. Your ryming seems to go together almost more then perfectly and even though I think that you can not produce very good imagry with ryming (Not true in some cases so dont take that seriously) I still got an image in my head of this and thats way better then some of the other stuff you come across on here, So over all, It was very lovely and I quite enjoyed it and I suppose thats all because I dont feel like rambling anymore as you are probably tired of me already : ) -
This poem acually reminds me of those little victorian girls who took the pictures of the fairys.. Did you ever see them???? Anyway.. I liked this poem and acually read it to my daughter.. she is MAD about TinkerBell and other such fairys..
Blessed Be
Lilli
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This is absolutly lovely. You can feel your passion for nature through your words you have such a gift. The flow is so smooth, and consistant which can be very hard to find. Great write i hope to read more of your work.
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hey girl sorry i didnt comment before when i first veiwed it, i had a phone call and had to run, so i didnt have the time to do it.. i really liked this poem though. i love anything that has to do with faries and make believe things, being irish i totally believe that there are little creatures out there...
the rythm and rhyme in this poem was awesome. you really put forth effort to make it flow beautifully.
But it seems to me a magical dance
and as I watch I'm in a trance.
i love that line, i could just see someone sitting there watching the little beauties dance, and wish that he/she could dance with them
very vivid imagery... all in all an awesome job. thanks for checking out my poem.. come check out some more, im gonna go look at more of yours. God Bless
Sarah Beth -
I love faeries, and you captured the imagination with fantastic description. Your word selection was great and the rhyme was perfect.
I hope to read more of your writing.
Karen -
The poem has a certain childlike innocence about it. I suppose that is one of it's best attributes. The descriptions aren't overly detailed, but are enough to let the mind fill in the blanks. nice work.
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oh my...i beleive you have a great talent for describing magical beings. i could just see the faeries! i love your description. it reminds me of either Legolas from LOTR or peter pan. lol did that sound weird? anyways, great write. keep it up.
always
lost -
Beautifully done!
hey! This is a very good poem! the rhyme scheme was really good, and i only got lost in one pace, on the 9th and 10th line, you went from long stanza's to short ones, and you kinda lost me there. your imagination was amazing here, it was very cute and magical! and the picture really brought a lot to the poem! i loved this piece! keep up the good work, your talented!
~always,
chelsea -
wonderful picture
Wow, that's a beautiful expression of faeries!!! I really liked the lines:
With crowns of flowers round their brows
they sit on tree limbs and they drowse.
You really do paint a wonderful picture, here. One thing, though, in the 6th to last line, "though" should be "thought". Thanx, also for your comment on my poem!
Keep writing, you're talented!
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Ah, just like ChikinWithRice I would love to write a poem about faeries, but can never seem to capture that little bit of magic. I liked the perspective, and I like how you added that you're too mesmerized to ever speak to the faeries. So you can write well about faeries, and you can rhyme without losing anything from piece - two of my weaknessess. I think this is beautiful.
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Wonderful
THis was really good. I've always wanted to write a poem about faeries, but i never can! This was very good! I liked it!..Alot. -
Aye..there is magick all around us if we just look. This piece was wonderful! Thank you so much for entering the contest.
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