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I need to Use my Thinker

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Sometimes my words get twisted

A little chatter on my lips

Sometimes they come out slurring 

 other times, jump out in a whisk

 

My words at times get jumbled

I try to untangled the mess

Instead they come up muffled

underneath my breath

 

I'll try to think much harder

The next time I go around

my words seem like a feather

Weightless they're falling without sound

 

I love to rhyme and rhythm

Hit the hammer on the nail

Building blocks and letters

Keeps me on the right trail


My best shot starts with others

That are poets just like me

A little inspiration moves my pen

Then the outcome is poetry

 

Come on and let me be tickled

A little laughter makes the muse

Muster up my thinking

keeps my fire fueled

 

As I keep the thinker going

Stay on top and jump ahead

 A little bit of imagination 

  Brings the illusion to my head

 

 

 

 

 

 

A contest entry

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  • Antebellum
    December 7, 2009
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    oh I really like the wording here.
    the flow is wonderful.
    thanks for entering.
    good luck.


  • Pleasantly Insane
    November 30, 2009

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    Wonderful poem, very nicely written. I really enjoyed reading this. Its so I can't even think of the right word for it. This is a wonderful piece!

    Grammatical errors:

    "Weightless they've falling without sound"--I'm thinking that maybe it should have been "they're" instead of "they've". It sounds better and more correct when read with the rest of the line.


  • Ajdmommy silver member
    November 27, 2009

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    Come on and let me be tickled loved it. It really shows how some writers poets fell.. thank you for your comment.. I actually plan to do more with it. I appeciate that.