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Daddy's Sorry

Hours ticks like dead clocks
I'm running in and out of
old used socks morning hours are away
the night is dark o what a delay
child sleeping in next room,
face tucked deep in the shadows.
 

Pretty little angel daddy sorry
wish I could hold and kiss you all night but
daddy gotta go gettin sick, mommy keeps
playing little old tricks.

Pain in the heart climbing in car
starting engine voom were off pain
in the heart goodbye daddy's little girl.

Meeting the stop I climb out see mama
strip at her favorite spot. Don't stop now
daddy's on the way and no longer wanting
old stupid play. You'll get what you deserve

people say.

 

What do you get when you disobey

lieing to me hurting my heart no longer

holding open arms. Goodbye little angel

your all I have daddy gotta fix mama bad ways

I pull out the gun I hide in the back boom

one shoot your mama out flat.

 

Hear the police come "get on the floor"

one last bullet daddy pulls the trigger boom

daddy's gone.

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  • longhorns-fan
    November 29, 2009
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    this sad but it is also strong and full of emotion. great write.


  • The Midnighters
    November 26, 2009

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    Small spelling mistake "tigger" should be "trigger" and the "i" need to be "I" 'and am running in and out of' Needs an "I'm" "I am" People won't get it. Anyhow its powerfull and good but some errores here and there but you can fix them no big deal.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    November 26, 2009

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    "Hear the police come "get on the floor"
    one last bullet daddy pulls the tigger boom
    daddy's gone." Wow. Great job on this poem. It was very powerful. Small spelling mistake "tigger" should be "trigger" No big deal just thought I'd point it out



    -Steve-