I stood there as time stood next to me.
Reminding me with every gasping breath
How easy it is to defy the 'Laws of Love'.
To stand there before the mighty creator and declare
That, for once in my insignificant life,
It is far too late for
A-T-O-N-E-M-E-N-T
The candelight flickered softly as you tottered
Up the gravel drive.
(Wearing nothing more than your corset and suspenders under that thick coat.)
You smiled, I smiled back.
Determind not to let on the way your smile makes my heart
Fall
To
Its
Knees.
I say, isn't it ironic the way I knelt here nights before,
C
R
U
M
B
L
E
D
Against a tombstone...
...Clutching my sanity tightly,
Forbidding my emotions to drag me through love once more.
(But then my will power has never been a match for your ---Perfection---)
So I let you take my hand and walk with me.
But I resented the way you always failed to notice how
CAPTIVATED
I
Was.
I always am when I get lost in your eyes.
Drowning in the sweet smell of your perfume
D...R...I...F...T...I...N...G through time and space.
Devoted to your prescence.
You smile again,
Lighting up a cigarette. The coils of smoke
Gracefully climbing the midlight air.
Then those words...
...The words like a stain on a perfect masterpiece.
The same, repettitive scentence I must repeat every night.
And, once again, I mutter shamefully, hoping you don't hear me...
"How much is it for tonight?"
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This isn't based on truth. But I like it anyways. :D
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i love the lin,"but i resented the way you failed to notice how captivated i was",i understand this perfectly,my ex never noticed,maybe if she did wed still be married and my head wouldnt be so messed up,lol,oh well,lol,beautiful poem,very powerful
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Damn!!!!
wow that was captivating to read i love the whole thing the story the ending the middle the all of it great job one of the best
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Wow
What an ending. It just blew me away. Perhaps your greatest achievement as a writer. And the story unfolds. The master and the mistress or the queen and the slave. Either way someone must pay. Just excellent poet.
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Hmm different and I liked! This seemed a tad bit like a prose piece because its flow was abit like a story. It seemed confusing to understand but a few stanzas later I managed to get back on track!
I hope you're okay and everything else is Liv! Keep your chin up!
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i loved the structure of it, and it really shaped the meaning well, great poem, well done! Love you xxxx
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Love you too... I dunno, I kinda tried to portray the confusion of the guy through the layout of the poem cos its all wonky.
xxxx
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