I break into pieces still
I try carrying my broken heart inside
Leaving all the past memories behind and
Waste away into the endless pain
That the devil created
Trying to break away before
The depression finds it's way inside
I've felt this numbness within me
As if I was frozen in time
I still feel another piece deep down inside of me
That completes this broken puzzled heart of mine
My shadow I fear
Never being able to escape it's darkest days or nights
Am I underneath the shadow of darkness forever?
Don't separate me from the one I love
Cigarette & drugs are bad but
The pain is much more worse
I wish I could erase the pain away
Apart of me feels as if I will never be set free
Behind all the shadows
Breathes a little girl
Struggling to break free and
Be with her love once more but
She feels all alone because
The moments slipped by us
You can't erase the pain and
Fix all the mistakes you made but
You could always learn from it
Baby I left pieces of me behind
So that you could always remember me
I miss you more than yesterday
Life is bumping right now but
As long as were together our shadows cannot defeat us
Or the love we share
I don't want to fall and say I lost it all because
I know you'll catch me and pick me up again
Author notes
I was inspirited by the song called "Breaking Inside" by Shinedown <3
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This poem is so sad,but in the end it does have hope. Sometimes though it's better to collect all the pieces of your heart and put them back into the puzzle so that another time when love comes your heart will be whole. I would only change one thing. Stanza 4 line 6: I would reverse us and by. (The moments slipped by us) It slowed the pace of my reading. Perhaps it would sound better unless you had a particular reason for stating it that way. God bless!
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Thank you for your kind words
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great
this was just great loved it so many thoughts and details..i really liked it glad u shared this with us
I hope things are better with you=]
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Thank you so much for your kind words they mean a lot
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Very intelligently done, I especially liked this bit:
'I still feel another piece deep down inside of me
That completes this broken puzzled heart of mine'
Excellent, descriptive imagery.
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Thank you for your kind words
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heart-felt
'baby i left pieces of me behind...'
wow, there are pieces of me here and there as well, thank you for your poem.
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Thank you for your kind words
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Very Beautiful!
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Thank you for your kind words
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That's what I'm talkin' about Maria!
You've done a fantastic job and thanks for posting this at Classic Rock Poetry too!!!
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Thank you for your kind words
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wow.
You're simply something else=p
"Behind all the shadows
Breathes a little girl
Struggling to break free and
Be with her love once more but
She feels all alone because
The moments slipped us by
You can't erase the pain and
Fix all the mistakes you made but
You could always learn from it"
^ that there^ speaks volumes for me.
Excellent write!
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Thanks for your kind words and I'm glad you can relate in a way ^^
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"I break into pieces still
I try carrying my broken heart inside
Leaving all the past memories behind and
Waste away into the endless pain"
Wow.. this was amazing! I am sure that everything will hopefully be okay. =]I have faith that it will all be.
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Thanks for the comment Bestie, I really hope things get better
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"Don't separate me from the one I love
Cigarette & drugs are bad but
The pain is much more worse
I wish I could erase the pain away
Apart of me feels as if I will never be set free" Wow I know that feeling
I'm sure things will be okay. You two love each other that's all that matters.
-Steve-
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Thanks so much for the comment Steve <3 I really hope everything turns out better
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You're welcome I hope so too
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